Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart reveals the amount of phisical activity of male and female of various ages in Australia during 2010. At a glance, it is suggested that most cases, women were more involved in regular exercises than men.

Overall, it is evident that a young group of ageing from 15 to 24 recorded the largest segment of physical works while the age of 45 to 54 of older women group ranked top scores involving these activities.

Following initial stage, wemen of younger group were engaged less exercises comparing to men, but it was started to increase from the age group of 25 to 34 where the distance was about 6% between them. After that different aged group of female beginning 25 to 64, women crossed the male significantly. But in the age of 65 and over

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s general subject and attempt an overview, noting that women were more active in most age groups. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the highest male figure is among 15–24-year-olds, but the highest female figure is for ages 45–54, not a general “older women group.” You also omit the actual percentages and leave the final comparison unfinished after “But in the age of 65 and over,” so a key feature is not reported. The chart shows men leading only in the youngest group, while women lead in every other group. The response is 13 words below the required minimum, which further limits its coverage. Include a complete overview and selected figures to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and a later comparison, and phrases such as “Overall” and “After that” signal progression. However, the development is difficult to follow because the overview and details are not clearly separated, and the comparisons are expressed vaguely rather than in a logical sequence. For example, “After that different aged group of female beginning 25 to 64” does not clearly explain which age groups are being compared. The final sentence is incomplete, leaving the 65-and-over group unresolved. Use one paragraph for the overview and another to compare the age groups in order, with clear links between each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “bar chart,” “regular exercises,” “age group,” and “recorded,” and you attempt to describe comparisons with “distance” and “ranked.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “amount of physical activity” for percentages, “largest segment of physical works,” and “crossed the male.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “phisical” and “wemen,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language such as “proportion,” “participation rate,” “higher than,” and “the figures for men and women.” This would make your descriptions clearer while retaining the range you are beginning to attempt.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “while” and a clause beginning “where the distance was about 6%.” However, errors in sentence construction and grammatical relationships frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “it is suggested that most cases” lacks a clear grammatical subject, and “women were more involved … than men” is not supported by a complete, precise comparison. The phrase “women crossed the male significantly” also has an unclear structure, while the final sentence is unfinished. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and clause connections. A complete final sentence would also help communicate the last comparison.

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