Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illurates the percentage distribution of Australian men and women across different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, women aged 45 to 54 represented the largest proportion and male aged largest percentage only 15 to 24 while other aged of male wa declined gradually. By Contrast, the percentages of those male aged 35 to 44 generally declined, while the the 65 and over aged group male and female experienced relatively minor fluctuations.

According to the table information 52.8% at the age of 15 to 24 male are more active then women, While, women at the age of 45 to 54 are really active rather than male, Wherareas, after the age of 15 to 24 male physical activity are declined gradually in every coming age.

Furthermore, women in the age of 15 to 24 her percenatge of the phyical activity was 47.7% which was low then male but her percenatge is gradually increasing such as in the aged of 25 to 34 it was increased minimum 1% then in the age of 35 to 44 it was increased minimum 4% the clear features demonstrates that women are more active in physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify relevant features, including the high female figure for ages 45–54 and the male peak among 15–24-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and contains an inaccurate trend: male activity did not decline gradually after the youngest group, since it rose from 39.5% at ages 35–44 to 46.7% among those 65 and over. The claim that women’s activity increased with age also overlooks the fall to 47.1% in the oldest group. Several comparisons are vague or incomplete, and the figures for the middle and older groups are mostly not reported. To make the summary more complete, give a clear overview of the gender crossover and describe both series’ main changes accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts an overview followed by details, so there is some basic organisation. However, progression is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or placed in unclear relationships. For example, the overview says male activity “declined gradually,” while the next paragraph repeats this claim without explaining the later rise. Linking expressions such as “By Contrast,” “According to,” and “Furthermore” are used, but they do not consistently clarify how the information connects. Some sentences combine several comparisons without clear structure, particularly the final paragraph. Organise the response around an overview and then one paragraph comparing the male and female trends, using clear references and links between each age group.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “physical activity,” and “gradually,” and you attempt to describe comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear, such as “represented the largest proportion,” “male aged largest percentage,” and “really active rather than male.” Spelling errors, including “illurates,” “percenatge,” and “phyical,” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Repetition of “age,” “percentage,” and “active” also limits flexibility. Aim for precise chart language such as “the proportion of men,” “was higher than,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, but complex constructions are often faulty, and errors frequently make comparisons harder to understand. Examples include “52.8% at the age of 15 to 24 male are more active then women” and “women at the age of 45 to 54 are really active rather than male,” where word order, agreement, and comparison structures are not controlled. The sentence beginning “Furthermore, women in the age…” also contains unclear clause structure and inconsistent reference. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are often missing or inaccurate. Practise building clear comparison patterns, for example, “At ages 15–24, the figure for men was 52.8%, compared with 47.7% for women,” and proofread each sentence for subject–verb agreement.

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