Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrates the ratio of men and women of different ages they were doing various physical activities in 2010 in austrilia.

The ages in the graph starts from 15 and till 65 or above it, the highest workout recorded in map is done by female of age 55 to 60 , while the lowest activities are also done by female at age of 35 to 44. If we have a sight on the map so we can see a position of ages where the males and females both are approximately equal and that age is 65 and over than that.

Now overall, the age of 15 to 24 females have done more activities from males but in contrast age 25 to 34 males are consider with high workout. From 35 to 64 age the females are in highest position while at this stage is quite lazy and at last both of 65 are have work at constant basis.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s broad subject and make some relevant comparisons, including that women exceed men in several middle age groups and that the figures are close among people aged 65 and over. However, key features are misreported: the highest female rate is for ages 45–54 (53.3%), not 55–60, and the lowest activity rate overall is men aged 35–44 (39.5%), not women. The statement that men are higher at 25–34 is also incorrect; women lead there. The response gives no reliable numerical support and its overview is unclear, so it only partially conveys the chart’s main information. Focus on accurate overall trends and select a few correct figures to support them.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the chart, comments on age groups, and then attempts an overall summary. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the overview comes after several details rather than guiding the report. Linking phrases such as “while,” “in contrast,” and “Now overall” are attempted, but some connect ideas inaccurately or awkwardly, making comparisons difficult to follow. The paragraphing also does not clearly separate the overview from supporting details. Organise the response into a brief introduction, a clear overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the figures, using links only where the relationship is accurate.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “age,” “activities,” “females,” “males,” and “workout,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing a statistical chart. “Ratio” does not accurately describe the percentages, “map” is used instead of “chart,” and “highest workout recorded” is an awkward way to report a participation rate. There are also spelling errors, such as “austrilia,” and repeated use of “activities” and “workout.” Use precise chart language such as “percentage,” “proportion,” “participation rate,” “higher,” and “lower,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including comparisons introduced by “while” and “but in contrast.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction make parts difficult to understand. For example, “the ages in the graph starts” has subject–verb disagreement, while “females have done more activities from males” uses an incorrect comparison structure. The final sentence, “both of 65 are have work at constant basis,” is also grammatically unclear. Practise building accurate comparison sentences, such as “Women were more active than men in the 25–34 group,” and check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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