Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart show th percentage of austrailian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

overall view, The highest percentage in physical activity was fe male and lowest percentage male. The age 45to54 female and male age 35to 44.

The chart describes the 15to24 age in female and male, female percentage 52.8and male 47.7 % physical active.

Austreailian women was physical active comparision male.The age in 25to 34 was physical active men comparison by women,48.9%men,42.2%women.

The age in 35to44 female physical active by the male female percentage 52.5and men 39.5. this age was the women more active in 2010but men lowest percentage

Now, 45to54 ages male and female, female i this age active 53.3% than comparison bt men.

Than, 55to64 ages was the male and female highest percentage female qand male also lowest, female % 53 and men 45.1

At the end, 65 oer the age was more closely male and female physical active percentage male 46.7,female 47.1 .

i concludes the all bar chart female was also activew comparison by male in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and attempt to compare both sexes across the age groups, including the close figures for people aged 65 and over. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: women’s highest rate is at ages 45–54, but men’s lowest is at 35–44, rather than the phrasing “highest percentage in physical activity was female and lowest percentage male” clearly explaining these patterns. Several figures are assigned to the wrong sex. For ages 15–24, you give 52.8% for women and 47.7% for men, when these figures belong to men and women respectively; the same reversal occurs at 25–34. The account also omits the overall pattern that women exceed men in every group except 15–24. Select and report the main trends accurately, then support them with correctly attributed figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic sequence, moving through the age groups from youngest to oldest, and it includes an opening and a concluding statement. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression is weakened by unclear paragraphing and repetitive, sometimes inaccurate linking, such as “Now,” “Than,” and “At the end.” The overview is separated awkwardly from the details, while several sentences repeat that one sex was more active without making the comparison clear. References such as “this age” and “the female” can also be difficult to follow. Group the information into a clear overview and two detail paragraphs, and use comparisons to connect related age groups rather than listing each one in the same way.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” and “physical activity,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated or formed unnaturally, for example “was physical active,” “more closely,” and “female was also activew comparison by male.” Spelling errors such as “austrailian,” “Austreailian,” and “comparsion” further reduce clarity. Some word choices also make the intended comparison hard to understand. Aim for accurate, concise chart language and check spelling carefully. Useful alternatives include “the proportion who exercised regularly,” “higher than,” and “the lowest rate”; these would help you describe the data more precisely without repeating “physical active.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to communicate comparisons and use some sentence forms beyond simple statements, but control is inconsistent. Many sentences lack a clear grammatical structure, as in “The age in 35to44 female physical active by the male female percentage 52.5and men 39.5.” Subject–verb agreement and articles are also problematic in “The bar chart show” and “The highest percentage … was fe male.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries are often missing, making several ideas run together. Most clauses rely on basic patterns, and attempts to combine information are frequently faulty. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, for example, “Women recorded 52.5%, compared with 39.5% for men in the 35–44 group.” Then check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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