Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female in various age groups who did frequently physical activity in 2010.

In general, the highest age groups 45 to 54 male and female regularly did activity in Austraila into 2010 higher than other age groups. While, 65 and over age groups who did regularly activity was at the similar points in 2010.

15 to 24 male groups was little higher than female groups 52.8%, while, the female did regularly activity in 2010, ws 47.7. However, the 25 to 34 male age groups were low at 42.2, as the wmoen did activity in the past, it was 48.9.

The 35 to 44 men age groups were a slightly lower than all age groups, and the number of female age groups were at higher level in 2010. The 45 to 54 male was at 43.1%, as a wide variety of female groups was at higest level 53.3% in Australia.

The average both elderly age groups male and female who did regularly activity in Austraila were at same levels in the past.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, such as 52.8% for men aged 15–24 and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the highest male rate was among 15–24-year-olds, not the 45–54 group, while women’s highest rate was at 45–54. The claim that the 65-and-over figures were at “the same levels” also overlooks the difference between 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women. Although you mention several age groups, the main pattern—that women had higher participation in every group except the youngest—is not clearly summarised. Focus the overview on these key comparisons and report the trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons across age groups. This gives the reader some organisation, and you use linking words such as “while” and “however.” However, there is no clear progression through the data: the final paragraph repeats the point about older people without giving a precise comparison, and some transitions are awkward or incorrectly punctuated, as in “While, 65 and over…”. Comparisons are also difficult to follow when several ideas are joined in one sentence. Organise the body by age groups or by the overall male–female pattern, and use clear topic sentences and accurate links between each comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age groups,” and “highest level,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated or unnatural, such as “did regularly activity,” “male groups,” and “at the similar points.” These choices sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to understand. There are also spelling errors, including “Austraila,” “wmoen,” and “higest,” which reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of chart-description expressions and use natural collocations for participation rates and comparisons. For example, describe people as “engaging in regular physical activity” and figures as “the percentage” or “the rate,” rather than repeatedly using “did activity.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few complex structures, including sentences beginning with “While” and “However,” but control is inconsistent, and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “The 35 to 44 men age groups were a slightly lower” and “the female did regularly activity,” where agreement, articles, and sentence structure are faulty. Singular and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “15 to 24 male groups was.” The response relies heavily on simple statements and does not yet show reliable control of more varied sentence patterns. Practise forming accurate comparisons, such as “The rate for men aged 35–44 was lower than the rate for women in the same group.”

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