Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the comparison of male and female physical activities divided into different age groups in Australia in the year 2010.

Overall, looking at the bar chart it is clear that women are more involved in regular physical activities than men, except at the age below 25 in which men are dominant in physical activities as compared.

In the age range 15-24 almost 52.8 percent australian men were recorded doing physical activities which is highest ias a whole and 47.7% women in the age group while in the age 35-44 the mens physical activities are recorded the lowest to 39.5% and that of females are 52.5% .

the range in which females are recorded the highest is 45-55 which is almost 53.3% oposite to that male ratio is 43.1 .however, the ratio almost get same in age groupof over 65 which is 46:47.

From the chart it is clear that females are more active in games and other physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s main contrast: women have higher activity rates in most age groups, while men lead among 15–24-year-olds. You also report several accurate figures, including 52.8% for young men and 39.5% for men aged 35–44. However, some key details are incomplete or imprecise. The female peak is correctly given as 53.3%, but the age group should be 45–54, not “45-55.” The final comparison, “46:47,” is too vague; the chart gives 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women aged 65 and over. The overview also says women are more active in “games,” which the chart does not show. A clearer summary of the overall trends, supported by precise comparisons, would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and details about selected age groups. This helps the reader follow the general comparison. However, progression within the detail section is uneven: the response moves from the youngest group to the 35–44 group, then to the female peak and the oldest group without consistently comparing both sexes or covering the intervening groups. Some linking is also awkward, as in “oposite to that male ratio,” and the final sentence repeats the overview rather than adding a useful comparison. Organise the body into a clearer sequence—for example, younger groups followed by older groups—and use straightforward links such as “whereas” and “by contrast” to show relationships between figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “age range,” “recorded,” “ratio,” and “highest,” so the topic is generally clear. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural for describing this data. “More involved in regular physical activities” and “dominant in physical activities” are less direct than saying that one group had a higher participation rate. “Games” introduces a meaning not supported by the chart, while “the ratio almost get same” is unclear. Spelling and presentation also need attention, including “oposite” and “ias.” Aim for accurate, consistent terms such as “percentage,” “rate,” and “participation,” and avoid adding activities that the chart does not specify.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex sentences, including the overview clause beginning “Overall” and the comparison introduced by “while.” Meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence construction and control are noticeable. For example, “in which men are dominant in physical activities as compared” is an incomplete, awkward comparison, and “the ratio almost get same” has an incorrect verb form and missing grammatical elements. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, such as “which is highest ias a whole” and the run-on transition “.however.” Use complete, clearly punctuated sentences and check subject–verb agreement and article use. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to understand.

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