Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the amount of Australian men and women in various age groups who did frequent physical activity in 2010.

Overall, men between the ages of 15 and 24 engaged in more physical activities than the men from all other ages with approximately 52 percent. Contrastly, women from age 25 to 64 participated significantly in their physical acitivities, with an evident decrease in the percentage of women who engaged in physical acitivity in their 15 to 20 and 65 and over.

According to the chart, the men started off strongly between ages 15 and 24 in their regular physical activity with a recordbreaking number percentage of about 52 percent. This perfect start significantly decreased from the ages of 35 to 44 with just a slight increase in ages 45 and over.

The womens' physical activity from ages 15 to 34 was completely opposite to how the men started. Approximately only 47 percents of the females were participating in frequent physical activity, but this percentage drastically increased as they grow older.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify a relevant overall contrast: men have their highest figure in the youngest group, while women are more active across much of adulthood. However, the overview is not fully accurate or sufficiently precise. Women’s activity rises from 47.7% at ages 15–24 to a peak of 53.3% at 45–54, then falls to 47.1% among those 65 and over; describing a decrease at “15 to 20” misstates the age group and the trend. The body also says women’s rate increased as they grew older, without reporting the later decline. For men, you note the fall and slight recovery but omit the key comparison that women exceed men in every group except 15–24. Select and report these main features more accurately and support them with figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear four-part structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs discussing men and women. This makes the general direction of the comparison easy to follow, and phrases such as “According to the chart” help signal a shift to detail. However, the progression is weakened by incomplete comparisons and unclear references. “This perfect start” refers to the men’s initial figure, but “a slight increase in ages 45 and over” does not specify the age groups or values. The final paragraph ends with a broad trend rather than completing the comparison with the women’s peak and subsequent fall. Use clearer links between the two series and organise the body around the main contrasts, rather than treating each series in isolation.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “engaged,” “participated,” “decreased,” and “increased,” so the chart’s general trends are understandable. There are also attempts at more emphatic wording, such as “recordbreaking” and “drastically,” but these are not always appropriate for a neutral data summary; “record-breaking” is especially overstated for a percentage comparison. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate, including “the amount of … men and women” and “participated … in their physical activities.” Spelling errors such as “acitivities” and “acitivity” also reduce accuracy. Prefer precise, natural reporting language such as “the proportion of men and women,” “the rate of participation,” and “rose gradually,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “Overall” and a subordinate clause beginning “as they grow older.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical choices are inaccurate. For example, “women from age 25 to 64 participated” would be clearer as “women aged 25 to 64 participated,” while “as they grow older” shifts into the present tense even though the chart describes 2010; use “as they grew older” or, more naturally, “the rate rose with age.” The sentence beginning “Approximately only 47 percents” also has an incorrect plural form after a percentage. Continue varying sentence structures, while checking tense consistency, age-group phrasing, and singular/plural agreement.

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