Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph compares the proportion of the Australian females and males who participated in daily physical exercise in the year 2010.
Overall, it is evident that females across the entire age group engaged vigorously in routine physical activities. However male teens of early age were actively invovle than females.The older adults of both gender were relatively of equal portion.
The male of age 15 to 24 actively engaged in physical exercise,with 52.8% higher than the females of same age who accounted for 47.7%, consequently the females of age 25 to 34 years had higher participation at 48.9% compared to males at 42.2 % this witnessed decline of males from the previous age age set.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response identifies the chart’s subject and reports two accurate comparisons: men aged 15–24 recorded 52.8%, above women at 47.7%, while women aged 25–34 reached 48.9%, compared with men at 42.2%. However, the overview is not reliable: women did not lead across every age group, since young men had the higher figure. The claim that older adults were “relatively of equal portion” is also too vague to capture the pattern. Most age groups and the key overall trend are omitted, and the response ends before summarising the remaining data. It is also 35 words below the required minimum. To address the task more fully, give a precise overview and compare the trends across all age groups.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is a basic structure, with an opening statement, an overview, and a paragraph giving specific figures. The comparisons between the two sexes are relevant, and “However” and “consequently” attempt to connect ideas. Nevertheless, progression is limited because the response stops after discussing only the first two age groups, leaving the account incomplete. The overview’s claims are not clearly linked to the figures that follow, and the final sentence combines several points in a way that makes the relationship between them difficult to follow. Organise the body by age-group trends, use clear transitions such as “by contrast” or “from this point,” and ensure each paragraph develops a complete part of the chart.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participated,” “physical exercise,” and “participation,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data. “Engaged vigorously” suggests intensity, which the chart does not measure, while “actively involve” and “equal portion” do not express the intended comparisons naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “invovle,” and repetition of “age” in “age age set.” Aim for precise reporting language and check spelling: for example, describe people as “doing regular physical activity” and figures as “the proportion” or “the percentage.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response attempts both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and the main figures can usually be understood. However, control is uneven, particularly in the longer sentence beginning “The male of age 15 to 24.” It contains awkward sentence boundaries and punctuation, and the clause “this witnessed decline of males” is not grammatically integrated with the preceding comparison. Other issues include missing articles and number agreement in “older adults of both gender,” as well as inconsistent spacing around punctuation. Use complete, clearly separated sentences and check agreement and article use. For example: “Among 15–24-year-olds, the male figure was 52.8%, compared with 47.7% for females.”
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