Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart compares the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

It is evident that the highest percentage of woman who are 55 to 64 they did regular physical activity ,while 35 to 44 age of men joind physical activity was the lowest .It is also noticable that ,the second highest was 45 to 54 age of women.

In terms of physical activity, the highest percentage of women who are 55 to 64 they attend physical activity regularly at 53%,wheres the men group only 45.1% in 2010.However, 65 and over age of men and women are almost similar at 46.7 and 47.1 respectively. The figure for 15 to 24 age of group were 52.8% and 47.7% respectively.

Regardining the remaning age of group, the figure for 25 to 34 age women group were 48.9% ,while the men were 42.2% in the given year . 35 to 44 age of men and women were 39.5% and 52.5% respectively .45 to 54 age of group who mostly joind the activity were the women group at 53.3%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant comparisons, including the male low of 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds and the figures for the oldest group. However, the overview is not fully accurate: women’s highest rate is 53.3% for ages 45–54, not 53% for ages 55–64; 53% is slightly lower. The claim that women aged 45–54 were the “second highest” is also incorrect, as their rate is the highest overall. Although you report many figures, the main pattern—that women exceed men in every age group except 15–24—is not clearly stated. A more precise overview and accurate ranking of the key features would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs giving comparisons and figures. This helps the reader recognise the topic and follow the age groups. However, the overall progression is limited because the overview repeats details that are then repeated in the body, particularly the 55–64 and 45–54 comparisons. Linking is also sometimes awkward or unclear, as in “Regardining the remaning age of group,” and punctuation around transitions is inconsistent (“in 2010.However”). The final paragraph moves through age groups without a clear organising principle. Grouping the data into a clear overview followed by comparisons of male and female patterns would improve progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the chart, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “regularly,” and “respectively,” so the topic remains understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “they attend physical activity regularly” is not a natural way to describe participation, and “joined physical activity” is repeated instead of using a more precise expression such as “engaged in regular exercise.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “noticable,” “Regardining,” “remaning,” and “joind.” These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main message, but careful proofreading and more natural chart-description vocabulary would make the report clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, and some figures are presented in understandable sentence patterns. However, the range of structures is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence construction, agreement, and punctuation. For example, “the highest percentage of woman who are 55 to 64 they did” combines incompatible clause structures, while “the figure for 15 to 24 age of group were” has problems with articles, phrasing, and subject–verb agreement. Several sentences also lack appropriate spacing after full stops or commas, making boundaries unclear. Aim for direct patterns such as “Women aged 45–54 recorded the highest figure, at 53.3%,” and check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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