Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of australian men and women in differebt age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall the number of women during age 45 to 54 is the highest number, While man in age 35 to 44 experienced the least number of physical activity, The numbers of women were always higher than except those at age 15 to 24.

In detail, There was some fluctuation in the numbers of man over the ages, The figures showed a slight declined at ages 15 was 52,8% became 39.5% in age 35 to 44 before it climbed consistently 46,5% for those who are 65 and over.

Women in contrast, had a slighr fluctuation, Started from the least common for ages 15 to 24 by 47.7 and outraced in 48,9 to keep growing and reached the highest percent 53,4 before falling with small exctent to 47,1 in the end for ages 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give an overview of key patterns: women’s activity was generally higher, while men’s lowest figure was in the 35–44 group. However, the overview is not fully accurate: women were not highest at 45–54 alone, as their figures were very similar from 35–64, and men were higher in the 15–24 group. Several details are also imprecise, including the male figure for those aged 65 and over (46.7%, not 46.5%) and the female peak (53.3%, not 53.4%). The response is 147 words, three words below the required minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are excluded. Add a little more accurate comparison and detail.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs describing men and women. This helps the reader follow the broad comparison. However, progression within sentences is sometimes unclear, particularly in “the figures showed a slight declined at ages 15 was 52,8% became 39.5%,” where the age range and direction of change are difficult to track. The overview also combines several claims in one long sentence, and transitions such as “In detail” and “In contrast” do not always make the relationships between points clear. Use shorter, complete sentences and organise each data paragraph in a clear sequence, such as starting value, change, and ending value.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “fluctuation,” “climbed,” and “reached the highest percent,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate: “the highest number” and “least number of physical activity” do not describe percentages naturally, while “outraced” is not suitable for the comparison. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “differebt,” “slighr,” and “exctent,” which reduce accuracy. Choose precise terms such as “percentage,” “rate,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check spelling and collocations carefully. This would make the comparisons clearer and more appropriate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using contrast and time clauses, for example “Women in contrast” and “before it climbed,” but the range of sentence structures is limited and many sentences contain errors that make the data relationships difficult to follow. Examples include “the numbers of women were always higher than except those at age 15 to 24,” which lacks a clear comparison, and “Started from the least common,” which is not a complete sentence. There are also problems with agreement and verb forms, as in “the number of women … is the highest number” and “a slight declined.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check tense, agreement, articles and punctuation. Accurate simple sentences are preferable to faulty complex ones.

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