Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage of Australien people in different age groups who did physical exercise in 2010. first Option is male at the age of 15-24 is the highest point of physical activity which was 52.8%,and at the age of 35-44 was the lowest 39.5%.On the other hand at the age of 25-34 and 45-54 group of people was slide difference that was 42.2%,43.1%.The age group of 65 and over physical activity was 46.7%.Further the female age group 45-54 was the highest number of physical activity which was 53.3%.The lowest point of female at the age of 65 and over which was 47.1%.The age group of female 35-44,55-64 were quite similar.on the other point of view the age group of 15-24 which was involved in physical activity the ratio were 47.7% . Moreover the female age group of 25-34 doing regular physical exercise and their ratio were 48.9%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report several relevant figures, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, the response mainly lists age-group details rather than summarising the chart’s main patterns. It does not clearly state the overall comparison: men were more active only in the youngest group, while women recorded higher rates in every other group. The claim that women’s lowest figure was for those aged 65 and over is accurate, but the overview is incomplete, and the similarity between women aged 35–44 and 55–64 is not explained with figures. A concise overview of the contrasting trends, followed by selected comparisons, would make the response more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response contains relevant information and moves from male figures to female figures, so there is some basic organisation. However, it reads largely as a sequence of loosely connected observations, with no clear introduction, overview, or well-defined paragraph progression. Connectors such as “On the other hand,” “Further,” and “Moreover” are used, but they do not consistently show the relationship between the figures; “on the other point of view” is especially unclear. Some references, such as “the age group of female 35-44,55-64,” are difficult to follow. Group the information into an opening overview and focused comparisons, and use linking phrases only where they clarify a contrast or trend.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “highest,” and “lowest,” and the reader can generally identify the figures being discussed. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning awkward: “first Option,” “highest point of physical activity,” and “the ratio were” do not describe chart data naturally. “Australien” is also misspelled, and “slide difference” appears to mean a slight difference. Use precise chart language such as “proportion,” “rate,” “peaked at,” and “was lowest among.” This would make comparisons clearer and reduce repetition of “age group” and “physical activity.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to report comparisons and use longer sentence patterns, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. For example, “The bar chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “first Option is male at the age of 15-24 is the highest point” has an unclear sentence structure. In “the age group of 25-34 and 45-54 group of people was,” the plural subject does not agree with “was.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, including the lowercase “first” after the opening sentence and missing spaces after commas. Practise building clear sentences with one main comparison at a time, checking agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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