Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart below illustrates the proportion of Australian women and men in various age groups who exercised regularly in 2010.

Overall, the female counterpart from the age of 25 and above peformed regular exercise more than the male folks in the same age group.The male gender had a significant proportion of regular physical activity only in the ages of 15 to 24.

The female gender shows a significant percentage of regular exercise from 35 years to 64 years with highest at 53.3 percentage, hence depicting that the female gender was more active than the male counterpart, eventually the number declining in old age (more than 65 years) at 47.1 percent.

On the other hand, the male gender aged 15 to 24 years was more than averagely engaged in exercises at 52.8 percent, but as they grew older, the number of male folks visiting the fitness centre declined reaching the lowest between 35 to 44 years at 39.5 percentage. By the age of 65, the number steadly raised to 46.7 percent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You provide a relevant overview: women recorded higher activity rates than men in every group from age 25 onward, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. You also identify the female peak at 53.3% and the male low at 39.5%, and your figures match the chart. This covers the main comparisons, though some features are less fully reported: for example, the female rate remains almost level from 35 to 64, and the male rate rises after its low point, details that could be compared more explicitly. The claim that men were active “only” at ages 15–24 is also too broad, since their rates in the other groups remain substantial. A more precise overview and fuller comparison of the age patterns would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of women and men. The contrastive phrase “On the other hand” helps signal the shift to male figures, and the information generally progresses from broad trends to specific values. However, the overview and the following paragraph repeat the point that women were more active, while the long sentence beginning “The female gender shows…” combines several observations and is difficult to follow. Some linking is also mechanical, particularly “hence depicting” and “but as they grew older.” Grouping the figures into clearer comparisons—for example, the male decline and recovery alongside the female rise and later fall—would create smoother progression and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “proportion,” “age groups,” “regular physical activity,” and “declining,” so the topic is clear. However, the range is uneven, and several expressions are unnatural or imprecise for describing chart data. “Male folks,” “female counterpart,” and “male gender” are repeated where “men” and “women” would be more natural; “visiting the fitness centre” also invents a specific activity not shown by the chart. There are spelling and word-form slips, including “peformed” and “steadly,” and “more than averagely engaged” is awkward. Aim for concise, accurate collocations such as “the proportion of men exercising regularly” and “the rate rose gradually.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “but” and a clause introduced by “as,” and the main trends remain understandable. However, some sentence structures are awkward or incomplete in their punctuation. In “from the age of 25 and above peformed…same age group.The male gender,” a space is missing after the full stop, and the sentence boundary is unclear. The phrase “with highest at 53.3 percentage” lacks an article and has an awkward grammatical construction; “with the highest figure at 53.3%” would be clearer. The sentence beginning “The female gender shows…” also shifts from past chart data to present tense. Use consistent past tense and check articles, sentence boundaries, and clause structure.

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