Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the bar chart below illustrates percentage between Australian men and women in different age groups who did physical activity on daily basis in 2010. We can notice right away the huge differences in the physical functioning between the different age groups of men and women changing substantionally where almost in every age gap women taking the lead in the physical working in there daily lives where men are only ahead of the women in the age from 15 to 24 at 52.8 percent and then when we look ahead at the age from 25 to 53 women generally are being seen to take the win at doing more physical work then men and at the last chart bar men and women are almost the same at physical activity from the year 2010.

the bar chart illustrated the physical activities of men and women in Australia in 2010. in a bar chart where there were percentage given and the different age group of men and women with different Coloured bars representing women and men differently and easy for the reader to identify.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make a relevant broad comparison: men lead among 15–24-year-olds, while women are higher in most other groups. However, the response only partially reports the main features. It gives just one accurate figure, 52.8%, and the claim that men and women are “almost the same” in the final group is broadly supported by 46.7% and 47.1%, but those figures are not stated. The age range “25 to 53” is inaccurate, and “physical work” does not clearly describe regular physical activity. The second paragraph mainly describes the chart’s colours and format rather than summarising its data. Include a clear overview of the contrasting trends and support it with several accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is some attempt to organise the response into two paragraphs, and phrases such as “whereas” and “then when we look ahead” signal comparison or sequence. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the first paragraph combines the introduction, overview and several comparisons in one very long sentence, while the second repeats the chart’s topic and focuses on its presentation. Connections between points are often unclear, and the repeated use of “and then” makes the progression feel loose. Separate the introduction, overview and key comparisons into purposeful sections, and use shorter sentences so each comparison is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “lead” and “physical activity,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which can make the data difficult to interpret. For example, “physical functioning” and “physical working” are not suitable descriptions of the chart’s measure, while “take the win” is too informal for an academic report. “Substantionally” is misspelled, and “different Coloured bars” is an unnecessary description of the visual design. Use precise chart language such as “participation rate,” “higher proportion” and “declined,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but the structures are often faulty, and the response shows limited control of sentence boundaries and basic forms. The opening, “the bar chart below illustrates percentage between Australian men and women,” is missing an article and uses an incorrect grammatical pattern. In “women taking the lead” and “men are only ahead,” verb forms are inconsistent; the long first sentence also lacks clear punctuation and becomes difficult to follow. The second paragraph begins with a sentence fragment: “in a bar chart where there were percentage given.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine comparisons with controlled clauses, checking articles, verb forms, agreement and punctuation.

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