Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Austalian people in different ages who doing physical exersice regularly in 2010.

Overall, the highest percentages of people doing exersice regularly in men at 53.3% from 45 to 54 ages, while the proportion of people active in physical exersice in women at 39.5 from age 35 44 was the lowest.

In terms of ages, Australian men spent the highest amount of time on exersice in 2010 from age 25 to 34 , 35 to 44, and 45 to 54 respectively , at 48.9%, 52,5%, 53.3% respectively . likewise , Australian consumers spent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and attempts an overview, but its main features are substantially misreported. The highest male figure is 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds, not 53.3% among men aged 45–54; 53.3% is the highest female figure. Likewise, 39.5% is the lowest male figure, not a female figure. The later comparison also assigns female values to men, and the final sentence is unfinished. As a result, the summary only partially addresses the task and provides little accurate coverage of the data. It is also 51 words below the required minimum. To improve, give a concise overview of the contrasting trends, then report selected figures accurately for both sexes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a detail paragraph. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview misidentifies the groups and the detail paragraph begins with a confusing list of age ranges and figures. The connector “likewise” does not establish a clear comparison, and the response ends with “Australian consumers spent” without completing the idea. Some punctuation and spacing around commas also interrupt the flow. Use one paragraph for a clear overview and another for accurate comparisons, with linking phrases such as “By contrast” or “In the remaining age groups” only where the relationship is clear. Complete each sentence and ensure each paragraph develops one purpose.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentages,” and “age,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate: people do not usually “spend” a percentage “on exercise,” and “Australian consumers” is unsuitable for describing people’s physical activity. There are also noticeable spelling errors in “Austalian” and “exersice,” while “physical exercise” is repeated. These issues make parts of the report less clear and precise. Use standard terms such as “participated in regular physical activity” and “the proportion of men/women,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid substituting vague or unrelated labels for the chart’s categories.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts several sentence forms, including an overview with “while” and a detail sentence listing figures, but control is inconsistent. The opening clause “people in different ages who doing” is missing a grammatical verb form, and “the highest percentages … in men at 53.3%” lacks a clear grammatical relationship between the subject and the figure. In “from age 35 44,” the age range is not correctly formed, and the final sentence is incomplete. Commas and spacing are also handled inconsistently. These errors sometimes make the intended comparisons difficult to understand. Build sentences around a clear subject and verb—for example, “The highest male participation rate was…”—and check verb forms, age-range constructions, and sentence completion.

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