Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart gives information about propartion of the Australian males and females in six different age groups who did physical activity in 2010

Overall, the percentage of Australian women who did physical activity on daily basis was more in all age groups 15to24 age group

In 2010, the percentage of Australian women , who did regular physical activity in three age groups in 35 to 44 , 45 to54 and 55 to 64 was higher in comparison to males at around more than half however the men invalved in physical avtivity in 15-24 age groups and over was almost similarat 47

Moving further, in 15-24 age groups men percentage was overtook women . The percentage of males was 52.8 percentage . whereas, females were at 47.7 in 25to 34 age groups . women were overtook the mens , with 48.9 percentage and mens at 42.2 percent

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant comparisons, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and the female figures of 48.9% and 42.2% for ages 25–34. However, the overview is unclear and inaccurate: women were not more active in every age group, since men led among 15–24-year-olds. The claim that men and women were “almost similar at 47” for the oldest group is also imprecise; the figures are 46.7% and 47.1%. You mention the middle-age female lead but do not clearly summarise the overall pattern or report the remaining age-group comparisons. The response is also three words below the required minimum. Develop a clear overview and select the key trends accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for an introduction, an overview and supporting details, so there is some basic organisation. It also attempts to guide the reader with phrases such as “Overall” and “Moving further.” However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview is incomplete and the final paragraph moves between age groups without a clear sequence. The sentence beginning “In 2010” combines several comparisons in a confusing way, while “in 25to 34 age groups” appears after a statement about 15–24-year-olds without a clear transition. Some linking words are used inaccurately, including “whereas” after a full stop. Group the comparisons systematically and use clear links to show contrasts.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “higher in comparison to,” and “regular physical activity,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation and spelling errors make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “propartion,” “invalved,” “avtivity,” and “overtook”; “on daily basis” also misrepresents the chart, which reports regular activity rather than daily activity. Repeated use of “percentage” and “age groups” limits variety. Aim for accurate, natural phrases such as “the proportion who exercised regularly” and “the figure for women exceeded that for men,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, for example, “The percentage of males was 52.8 percentage, whereas females were at 47.7.” However, complex attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. The overview sentence lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “women were overtook the mens” uses an incorrect verb form and “men percentage was overtook women” has an unclear subject and verb pattern. There are also problems with articles, plurals and punctuation, as in “in 15-24 age groups” and the comma spacing in “women , who.” Practise complete comparison sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and use consistent punctuation.

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