Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graph compares the percentage of Australia men and women of six different age groups doing regular physical activity in the year 2010.

Overall, it is clear to see that age groups between 45 and 54 showed the greatest female participant of physical activity and female participant are more active than men.

The 15- 24 year age group of male is the most active only about 52.8% and 47.7% of women. However, the male participant of physical activity was gradually decrease to 42.2% and reached it around 39.5% between 35 and 44 group. Surprisingly, this figure increased slightly over 50 in the group of 65 and over.

In 15 -24 age groups of women doing physical activity is 47.7% . This figure increased significant to 53.3% between 45 to 54 age group but decreased slightly to 53 and 47.1% respectively between 55 to 64 and over 65 age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give an overview, noting that women were generally more active and that female participation peaked in the 45–54 group. You also report several relevant figures accurately, including 52.8% for young men and 53.3% for women aged 45–54. However, the overview is not fully accurate: women were not more active in every age group, since men led among 15–24-year-olds. The male trend is also described as rising “over 50” for those aged 65 and over, whereas the figure is 46.7%; it rises from the 35–44 low but does not exceed 50. Include the key gender crossover and describe the overall trends more precisely to develop the summary more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate discussion of male and female figures. This makes the main comparison reasonably easy to follow. Linking words such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Surprisingly” help signal relationships, although some connections are not quite logical: “However” introduces a male decline without a clear contrast, and “Surprisingly” does not clarify the trend being highlighted. The male and female descriptions also repeat the youngest age group, while the comparison between the sexes is not consistently integrated. Organise the body around the main patterns—men’s initial lead, women’s higher rates in most later groups, and the age-related changes—and use references such as “this rate” only where the figure is unmistakable.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing a chart, including “percentage,” “participant,” “increased,” “decreased,” and “age group.” These choices communicate the general subject and trends, and the meaning is usually clear. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, however: “greatest female participant” should refer to the highest proportion or rate, and “male participant of physical activity” is awkward. “Increased significant” also uses the wrong form of the word. Aim for precise chart language and consistent terms such as “participation rate” or “proportion of men and women who exercised regularly.” This would make the comparisons more natural and reduce ambiguity without requiring a much broader vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “However” and a sentence describing a change across age groups. Some grammatical errors remain, and they occasionally make relationships or trends harder to interpret. For example, “age groups … showed the greatest female participant” has an unclear grammatical construction, while “the male participant … was gradually decrease” has an incorrect verb form. There are also agreement and sentence-pattern problems in “female participant are more active,” and the opening phrase “percentage of Australia men and women” needs a possessive form. Work on subject–verb agreement, verb forms after auxiliaries, and complete, well-formed comparison sentences. More accurate control of these patterns would make your range clearer.

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