Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart below illutrates the proportion of Australian men and women in various age groups doing physical activity regularly in 2010.

Overall, in all age groups Australian women led the men proportion wise for doing physical activilty. However, in the youngest group male participants were ahead of females. None of the age group crossed 60% for participation.

In all age groups men legged behind women in physical activity participation except the youngest group. Highest of all males exercised were the youngest belonging to age group 15 to 24. The least active men were observed in age group 25 to 44, with their mere share of 43.1% of that age group being active. However Men aging 65 and over were in almost equal number as their female counterparts, trailing women only by 0.4%.

Women however, led all the age groups except the youngest, in which they were behind men by 5.1 percentage points. Least active age group for women was the oldest with only 46.7% of women being active. Highest active age group of the women was 45 to 54, with 53.3% of women doing regular physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrast between the sexes and give a clear overview: women were generally more active, while men led in the youngest group. Several comparisons are accurately reported, including the 5.1-point male lead among 15–24-year-olds and the near-equal figures for those aged 65 and over. However, some details are misreported or unclear. The least active male group was 35–44, at 39.5%, not 25–44 with 43.1%; 43.1% belongs to men aged 45–54. The oldest women’s figure was 47.1%, not 46.7%. Also, the claim that women led in all groups except the youngest conflicts with the chart: they led in every group from 25–34 onwards, but the overview could state this more precisely. Correcting these details and developing the trends more consistently would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to separate discussion of men and women. This makes the main comparison easy to follow, and linking words such as “However” and “Overall” help signal contrasts. The progression is not fully controlled, though: the overview says women led in all age groups before qualifying this with the youngest group, and the next paragraph repeats the same contrast. Some transitions also create awkward or unclear relationships, particularly “However Men aging 65 and over,” where the intended comparison would be clearer with a direct connector such as “By contrast.” Grouping the figures by the overall pattern—first the youngest group, then the remaining groups—could reduce repetition and make the comparisons more cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “participation,” “trailing,” and “percentage points,” so the chart is generally described clearly. There are also attempts at less common phrasing, but some choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “men legged behind” should be “men lagged behind,” while “Highest of all males exercised” is not a natural way to describe the peak. “In almost equal number” is also unsuitable for percentages, and “physical activilty” contains a spelling error. Repeated use of “active” and “age group” makes parts of the report less varied. Aim for precise collocations such as “the highest proportion of men were active” and “the figures were almost equal,” while checking spelling and avoiding overly conversational expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, including contrast clauses with “However” and a relative clause in “the oldest with only 46.7% of women being active.” Most of the meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical patterns are not well controlled. For example, “None of the age group crossed 60%” has a number-agreement problem; use “None of the age groups exceeded 60%.” In “Highest of all males exercised were the youngest,” the sentence structure is difficult to follow, and “men aging 65 and over were in almost equal number” has an unsuitable construction. Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “However Men.” Use straightforward subject–verb structures for comparisons, and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries to make the more complex forms reliable.

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