Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustartes regular physical activity of Australian men and women in different age groups in 2010. Overall, it performed good physically activity in all ages group in despite of lowest average workout in 35 male age group done lowest percent of activity almost 39.5 which was same with 25 and 35 and 45 male age group workout whic was ratio 42.2 and 39.5 and 43.5 respectively, IN contrast to 65 and over age group both male and female done physically activity with same percent which was 46 .7 and 47.1.The amzing thing was that in 44 and 54 and 64 female ages done physically activity with ratio of 52.5 , 53.3 and 53 percent respectively as compared to men performed good ratio work out. On the other hands, in 24 age of female done less physical activity as compared with men which was ratio was 47.7 otherwise in all group of ages female was ahead of menin workout

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make a relevant attempt to compare the sexes, noting that women were ahead in most age groups and that men had their highest figure among 15–24-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear: “it performed good physically activity in all ages group” does not state the main pattern accurately, and the claim that the 65-and-over figures were “the same” overlooks their small difference. Several figures are misreported: men aged 45–54 recorded 43.1%, not 43.5%, and the 25–34 male figure is 42.2%, not part of a shared lowest value. The response also does not clearly summarise the overall trends. A more accurate overview and carefully selected comparisons would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response around an overview and comparisons, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In contrast” and “On the other hands” show awareness of how to connect ideas. However, the information does not progress clearly: several age groups and figures are crowded into one long sentence, and the reader has to work out which figures belong to which group. The contrast between men and women is repeated rather than developed in a clear sequence. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, then group the figures logically—for example, men’s pattern first and women’s pattern second. Check that each linking phrase accurately signals the relationship between the ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant vocabulary, including “physical activity,” “age group,” “percent” and “in contrast,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “performed good physically activity,” “average workout” and “ratio work out.” These choices sometimes make the intended comparison difficult to understand. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “illustartes,” “amzing” and “whic.” Aim for precise chart language rather than informal or unclear phrases: describe figures as percentages, and use verbs such as “rose,” “fell” or “was higher” to report trends. Proofreading spelling and word forms would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and comparison structures, for example “in despite of” and “as compared with,” but the sentence patterns are often faulty, and the response relies on long, loosely connected sentences. Errors in verb forms and agreement include “both male and female done” and “female ages done”; these should use an appropriate subject and verb construction. Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistently controlled, making some comparisons hard to follow. Try writing shorter, complete sentences with one main comparison each, and check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries. More accurate simple structures would communicate the data more reliably than complex sentences that are not yet controlled.

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