Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The diagram displays average of male and female in different age groups who did daily physical exercise in 2010 in Australia. Overall, it is clear that the female ratio was significantly higher in the most of the age groups instead of the male, only in one age group male average was higher than the female.

In terms of age groups, only 15 to 24 years old males was higher in doing physical exercise daily rather than the female, respectevily 52.8% and 47.7%. Age group between 65 and over male-female ratio was mostly similar in terms of doing regular exercises, male average was 46.7 and female average was 47.1% on daily basis. However, largest different of male female physical activity was seen in the age group between 35 to 44, male around 39.5% and female around 52.5% did exercise daily.

The female ratio rose gradually in all age groups except 65 and above. Whereas, in starting age groups male ratio declined untill 35 to 44 years and after that in rose gradually. It is clear that Australian females was more keen towards their physical well being than the males.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: women recorded higher participation in five age groups, while men led among 15–24-year-olds. The overview also notes the near-equal figures for the oldest group, and your comparison of the largest gap at ages 35–44 is well supported by the data. These choices address the task clearly and show a good grasp of the chart. However, the statement that the female rate “rose gradually in all age groups except 65 and above” is too broad: it rises to ages 45–54, then edges down at 55–64 before falling more noticeably in the oldest group. Also, describing the figures as daily exercise is not fully consistent with the chart’s “regular physical activity.” Keep the overview precise and avoid generalising beyond the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall shape: an introduction and overview are followed by comparisons and then a summary of the trends. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Whereas” help signal relationships, and the reader can follow the main comparisons. This is a coherent arrangement, with some features of stronger progression. At times, though, the links are mechanical or the reference is unclear. For example, “The female ratio rose gradually in all age groups except 65 and above” does not specify the sequence of age groups and oversimplifies the trend. The final sentence repeats the general comparison rather than adding a distinct chart feature. Grouping the data into male and female trends, and using clearer references such as “the female figure,” would make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use enough topic vocabulary to describe the chart, including “age groups,” “physical activity,” “ratio,” and “gradually,” and the intended comparisons are generally understandable. There are also attempts at more specific phrasing, such as “largest different” and “physical well being,” but these are not natural or accurate collocations. “Average” is repeatedly used where “percentage” or “figure” is intended, and “daily” changes the chart’s meaning from regular activity to exercise every day. Spelling errors such as “respectevily” and “untill” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise chart language and check collocations and spelling; this will make your adequate range more flexible and reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “however,” and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with agreement and sentence construction. For example, “only 15 to 24 years old males was higher” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “Australian females was” also needs plural agreement. The sentence beginning “Age group between 65 and over…” is incomplete in its construction, and “after that in rose gradually” contains an incorrect pronoun and verb form. Articles and prepositions are also sometimes missing or awkward, as in “in the most of the age groups.” Review subject–verb agreement and build complete comparison sentences; greater accuracy across these structures would strengthen the response.

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