Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

According to bar chart,i will explain that there is x-axis where demonstrate age group of american female and male. On the other side, y-axis demonstrate the percentage of American women and men whoever doing physical activity. Let's elaborate that the 15-24 age group people are doing physical activity Moreover 52.8 percent of male doing physical activity in contrast women 47.7 doing physical activity. consequently male maximize from female. American female and male at the age group of 25-34 whether male are 42.2 in compare with women having 48.9.In this age group, female lead with male.American female and male at the age group of 35-44 , female doing activity 52.5 and male doing 39.5.In this age female is conscious about physical activity. American female and male,age of 45-54 furthermore female 53.3 and male 43.1 doing physical activity.In this age of group of female are more conscious, determine and maintain herself rather than male.American female and male 55-64 ,in this age also women lead with male.American female and male,at the age group of 65 and upto 65 are almost same 46.7 male and 47.1 female for instance due to increasing age they feel low and effortless.consequently,at tge age of 15-24 age group female and male are maximum interest in doing physical activity because they are young, adult,active and passionate about her/ him health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report several figures accurately, including the male and female rates for ages 15–24, 25–34, 35–44 and 45–54, and you correctly note that the sexes are close in the oldest group. However, the response mainly lists age groups rather than selecting and summarising the chart’s main features. It lacks a clear overview of the overall pattern: men peak among 15–24-year-olds and then fall before recovering, while women rise to a middle-age peak and exceed men in every other group. The 55–64 figures are not given, and the claim that young people of both sexes show the greatest interest is inaccurate for women. Explanations about being “conscious” or feeling “low” are not supported by the chart. Focus on the data and its comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the age groups in chart order, which gives it some basic organisation, and comparisons such as “female lead with male” help signal the intended relationship. However, there is no distinct overview, and the repeated openings—“American female and male at the age group…”—make the progression mechanical rather than clearly summarised. Several linking words, including “Moreover,” “consequently” and “for instance,” do not express the relationship between ideas accurately. The final sentence returns to the youngest group without a clear reason, while the 55–64 group is mentioned without its figures. Group the information into an overview and meaningful comparisons, and use fewer, more precise transitions and clear paragraphing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “in contrast” and “lead,” so the reader can generally identify the topic and comparisons. However, the range is limited and several phrases are awkward or imprecise, such as “male maximize from female,” “female is conscious about physical activity” and “low and effortless.” Repeated use of “doing physical activity” also makes the description less natural. Some word choices introduce unsupported interpretations rather than describing the figures. Aim for concise, conventional language for reporting data, such as “the proportion,” “was higher than,” “reached a peak” and “declined.” This would make comparisons clearer and reduce repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to use comparisons and longer sentences, but sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty, and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas harder to follow. For example, “there is x-axis where demonstrate age group” lacks a correctly formed clause, while “female doing activity 52.5 and male doing 39.5” omits necessary verbs and articles. Subject–verb agreement is also inconsistent in “y-axis demonstrate,” and punctuation is often missing, especially around age-group phrases. Most sentences rely on similar simple patterns, with limited accurate control of complex structures. Practise complete clauses with clear subjects and verbs, for example, “Women recorded 52.5%, compared with 39.5% for men,” and check agreement and sentence boundaries.

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