Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The rendered bar chart illustrates the information how many Australian male and female did regular physical activities in various age group. The data is calibrated in ratio.

After taking the statistical data into account, it may infer that the highest of male and female doing regular physical activities was noticed as 53.3% and 43.1 % between 45-54 years. Followed by the proportion male and female doing physical activities between age 55 to 64 is noticed as 53.0% and 45.1%. However, only 46.7% and 47.1% male and female doing a physical activity regularly between 65 and over. Moreover in 2010

Turning towards the rest of details it clearly seen that the male and female did physical activity regularly between age group 25 to 34 was noticed as 48.9% and 42.2% respectively. Similarly, a minor difference between age group of 15 to 24 and 35 to 44 of male and female was noticed as 52.8% and 47.7 and 52.5, 39.5% in the same year.

Overall, it is readily apparent that the maximum of Australian men and women did physical activity between the age group of 45 to 54. While least of Australian males and females did physical activity between the age group of 65 and over.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features and making relevant comparisons. You have successfully highlighted the peak participation age group (45-54) and the lowest participation group (65+). However, the report lacks a clear, cohesive overview at the beginning; while you included an 'Overall' paragraph at the end, the initial summary is a bit weak. Some data points are presented in a list-like fashion, which slightly hinders the 'reporting' aspect of the task. To improve, ensure you group data more logically rather than just listing percentages for each age bracket, and provide a more comprehensive summary of the trends in the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'Turning towards the rest of details' and 'After taking the statistical data into account'. The transition between sentences is occasionally abrupt, and the final sentence of the second paragraph ('Moreover in 2010') is an incomplete fragment that disrupts the flow. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that every sentence is complete and contributes to the logical progression of your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information, using terms like 'proportion', 'calibrated', and 'statistical data'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'it may infer' (should be 'it may be inferred') and 'the highest of male and female' (should be 'the highest percentage of males and females'). The phrasing 'The data is calibrated in ratio' is also slightly unnatural in this context. To improve, focus on using more precise terminology for data description and ensure that your word forms (nouns vs. verbs) are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have frequent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'how many Australian male and female did' (should be 'how many Australian males and females participated') and 'it clearly seen' (should be 'it is clearly seen'). Additionally, some sentences are missing necessary prepositions or have awkward phrasing, like '47.7 and 52.5, 39.5%'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall clarity. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for missing verbs will help improve your score.

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