Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
he bar chart illustrates the rate of Australian men and women in various age groups who perform daily physical movements in 2010.
In third forth and fifth group the ratio of women is almost same, While in first second and in last group the ratio is similarly same. In males the ratio of first group is highest then reduce in second but then there are slight increase of ratio from thirst to last group.
In the first second and in the last group the female having the similar numbers. It is slightly lower then remaining groups that's tell that the age period from thirty five to sixty four participates in more activities it include gymnastics calisthenics and other activities. Then in males groups the percentage of first group is much higher then others and the second groups are less then to first group having about 10 percentage gap .the classification of groups from third to last there are slight increment in numbers by the sequence.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to summarise the data but struggles with clarity and accuracy. While it identifies some trends, the description of the age groups is confusing, as the specific age ranges are not mentioned, and the terminology used (e.g., 'third forth and fifth group') is vague. The comparison between genders is attempted, but the lack of precise data points makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. To improve, you must clearly state the age categories provided in the chart and use specific percentages to support your observations rather than relying on general descriptions like 'highest' or 'lower'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt to group information, the transitions between sentences are often abrupt or confusing. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'in the first second and in the last group'. Paragraphing is present but does not effectively separate the different trends, making the overall structure feel disjointed. To improve, focus on using linking words like 'conversely', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'ratio of', 'group', and 'numbers' are used repeatedly, which restricts the range of the response. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'daily physical movements' instead of 'regular physical activity' and 'thirst' instead of 'third'. The lack of variety in descriptive language makes the report feel simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant disparity'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the female having the similar numbers'), incorrect prepositions, and missing articles. Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'that's tell that the age period... participates in more activities'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. Focusing on basic sentence construction, ensuring verbs agree with their subjects, and proofreading for small errors like 'then' versus 'than' will significantly improve your score.
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