Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart show percentage of Australian men and women who do regular physical activity in 2010.First, for women, the age 15 to 24 is 47.7%. Then it go up to 52.5% for age 35 to 44. The highest is 45 to 54 group with 53.3%. For old women 65 and over, it go down to 47.1%. Women is more active than men in many groups.For men, 15 to 24 age is highest with 52.8%. But then it drop very fast. In 35 to 44 age group, it is only 39.5%. This is the lowest number for men. After that, it increase again. For men 65 and over, it is 46.7%.In conclusion, men and women have different numbers for exercise. Young men do more than young women, but older women do more than men. In the end, they are almost same

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response provides a summary of the main features, but it fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified key data points, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing figures rather than synthesizing trends effectively. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview that highlights the most significant differences between genders and age groups. The conclusion is also quite brief and lacks a cohesive summary of the overall patterns observed in the chart. Expanding on the comparisons between the groups would help you meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive report.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the flow between sentences is often repetitive and lacks a variety of cohesive devices. You rely heavily on simple transitions like 'First' and 'Then', which makes the writing feel mechanical. To improve, try using more sophisticated linking words and phrases such as 'In contrast', 'Conversely', or 'Furthermore' to connect your ideas more fluidly. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument across the different age categories.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is functional but limited. You tend to repeat basic verbs like 'go up', 'drop', and 'increase'. To achieve a higher band score, you should incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak', or 'remain stable'. There are also some minor errors in word choice, such as 'different numbers for exercise', which could be expressed more precisely as 'varying levels of physical activity'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you describe the data with more precision and sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart show', 'it go up', 'it go down'). There is also a lack of complex sentence structures, as most of your sentences are simple and follow a similar pattern. To improve, focus on using a mix of complex sentences, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions (e.g., 'While women in the 35-44 age group showed the highest participation, men in the same category experienced a significant decline'). Improving your control over basic grammar and punctuation will significantly enhance the clarity of your writing.

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