Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of different age groups of male and female in Australia who did consistent physical activity in 2010.

Overall, men in age group of 15 to 24 have the higher percentage while on any other age group, women leads the graph. Women between the ages of 45 to 54 have highest rate whereas men between 35 to 44 have the lowest rate. In the age bracket of those aged 35 to 44 have the biggest gap between the number of individuals who exercise regularly.

Males in the younger age bracket have the largest percentage of people who workout, with 52.8%. This number decreased significantly among those aged 25 to 34 and those aged 35 to 44, with 42.2% and 39.5%. The proportions for the four age groups were increased steadily, namely 45 to 54, 55–64, and ,65 and over, were 43.1%, 45.1%, and 46.7%, respectively.

Females who does regular physical activity have increased slowly from 47.7% to 52.5% were age range of 15-24 to age range of 35 to 44 and remained stable from the 35 to 44 age group to 55 to 64 age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response covers the main features of the data and makes relevant comparisons. You successfully identified the highest and lowest points and noted the gender-based trends. However, the summary is slightly marred by inaccuracies in data interpretation. For instance, you stated that women lead the graph in all age groups except 15-24, but the data shows men also lead in the 25-34 category. Additionally, the description of the female trend is somewhat confusing and does not fully align with the provided chart. To improve, ensure that your data reporting is precise and that your overview clearly highlights the most significant trends without contradictory statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'namely' and 'respectively', to link information. However, the progression of ideas is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as the sentence starting 'In the age bracket of those aged 35 to 44 have the biggest gap'. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, which affects the flow. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensuring that each sentence connects smoothly to the next to create a more cohesive narrative.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'bracket', and 'consistently'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'women leads the graph' (should be 'women lead') and 'the proportions... were increased steadily' (should be 'increased steadily'). While these errors do not impede communication, they limit the precision of your writing. To improve, work on subject-verb agreement and ensure that your vocabulary choices are contextually appropriate for describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'Females who does regular physical activity' (subject-verb agreement), 'were age range of 15-24 to age range of 35 to 44' (missing prepositions and awkward structure), and punctuation errors like the stray comma in ',65 and over'. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions when describing data ranges.

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