Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women in different age chategories who engaged regular physical activity in 2010
Overall, it is evident that the number of woman are the highest in regular physical activity,while man experienced the greatest decrease in 2010
From 25 to 34 age group to 35 to 44 followed an upward trend, increasing from 47.7 to 52.5 respectively.Woman age group of 45 to 54 accounted for the largest proportion at 53.3%.By contrast the age group from 55 to 64 followed the opposite pattern ,decreasing from 53% to 47.1%.
Turning to the ramining age group for man, the figure for the young people at the peak at 52.8%, and as the age is growing man are tend to not doing physical activities, it fell down to 39.5% for the age group 35-44 after that it was steadily increasing for all the age group for man and that accounted for 47.1%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response provides a summary of the main features, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify some trends, the overview is inaccurate; for instance, stating that the number of women is 'the highest' is vague, and the claim that men experienced the 'greatest decrease' is not clearly supported by the data. Furthermore, the description of the data for men is confusing and contains inaccuracies regarding the figures provided. To improve, ensure that you clearly distinguish between age groups and accurately report the specific percentages shown in the chart. You should focus on selecting the most significant trends rather than listing every data point, which will help provide a more coherent summary of the information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the transition 'Turning to the ramining age group for man' is awkward, and the logical flow between sentences is occasionally disrupted by unclear referencing. The progression of ideas is sometimes difficult to follow because the comparisons between men and women are not clearly linked. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'chategories' and 'ramining', and some word choice issues, such as 'man are tend to not doing'. These errors occasionally hinder the clarity of your report. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. Additionally, ensure you are using the correct forms of words (e.g., 'men' instead of 'man' when referring to the plural group). Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns will help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of woman are'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'man are tend to not doing'), and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading your work to correct basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentence structures are grammatically sound.
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