Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Illustrate the given information about the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010 . In this graph the providing information about men and women the age 15to 24 the percentage of men 52.8% and women 47.7%.The Australian men and women the age of 25 to 34 in this age the percentage of men 42.2and women 48.9%. In the third graph the percentage of men 39.5 and women 52.5% in this data the ages of men and women 35 to 45 years old . In the forth graph of Australian men and women 45 to 54 in this age the men and women 43.1% men and 53.3% women . The age of 55 to 64 years old in this age the percentage of men 46.7% and women 47.1% in this session the Australian men and women are older than 65 years.
According to the given information the percentage of Australian men is higher than women in physical activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or identify significant trends. The information is presented as a list of data points for each age group rather than a coherent summary. Furthermore, the final sentence contains a factual error, as the data shows that women participated in physical activity more than men in most age groups, contradicting the student's conclusion. The response lacks a clear structure and fails to highlight the main features or make meaningful comparisons, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. The report is largely descriptive and lacks analytical depth.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. There is no clear logical progression; the text reads like a series of disconnected sentences rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, and the referencing is repetitive and mechanical (e.g., 'In the third graph', 'In the forth graph'). The lack of transition words or logical connectors between the data points hinders the flow of information. To improve, the student should group related information and use linking words to connect ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrases like 'the percentage of' and 'in this age'. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or comparisons (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'surpassed'). Some word choices are awkward, such as 'in this session' and 'the providing information'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey basic data points but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and awkward sentence structures. For example, 'the age 15to 24' should be 'in the 15 to 24 age group'. There are also issues with sentence boundaries, as many sentences are fragmented or run-on. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive clauses. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation significantly impacts the quality of the writing.
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