Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian people based upon their gender (male and female) including their different age groups who performed physical exercise on daily basis in 2010.

The percentage of Australian men between the age group of 15 to 24 doing regular physical exercise was rising more than women between 15 to 24 but the male percentage falls gradually down at the age group of 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 and women percentage did the highest work out during these age groups in 2010.

However, the male and female percentage of Australian remained the same at the age of 65 and over it in 2010.

Therefore, percentage of female aged between 25 years old to 64 years gives a remarkable sign of women's worth and efforts for their healthy body by doing more physical activity in 2010 as compared to the men doing regular physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the trends for different age groups and the comparison between genders. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear overview or summary of the most significant trends. The description of the data is occasionally imprecise, such as stating that the male percentage 'falls gradually down' without referencing specific figures or clear comparative data points. To improve, ensure you include specific data points (percentages) to support your claims and provide a more cohesive summary of the overall patterns observed in the chart rather than just listing observations for each age group.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the logical progression is hindered by the use of somewhat repetitive sentence structures and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. While 'However' and 'Therefore' are used, the transitions between the age groups feel mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when discussing the 'same' percentage at age 65, which could be better linked to the specific data. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically into the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'doing regular physical exercise' and 'percentage of Australian men' are used multiple times. There is an attempt to use some descriptive language, such as 'remarkable sign', but it is not entirely appropriate for an academic report on data. The word choice is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. To improve, try to use synonyms for 'percentage' (e.g., 'proportion', 'figure') and 'doing' (e.g., 'participating in', 'engaging in').

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the male percentage', 'the age group of 15 to 24') and prepositions. Some sentences are clunky, such as 'the male and female percentage of Australian remained the same', which lacks proper noun-adjective agreement. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles when referring to specific groups or data categories.

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