Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given char illustrates the information about the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, it is clear that women aged 45 to 54 recorded the highest percentage of regular physical activity whereas, men aged 65 and over recorded the lowest share.

Among men, those aged 15 to 24 recorded the highest percentage(52.8%) of regular physical activity; Meanwhile, women accounted for 47.7%. Men aged 25 to 34 accounted for regular physical activity, with 42.2% while, 48.9% women. Aged group of 35 to 44,male occupied 39.5% and 52.5% female. The highest share 53.3 percent of female aged 45 to 54 and 43.1 of male.

Among those aged 55 to 64 amounted to 53% of female did regular physical activity, compared with 45.1% of male . Furthermore, among those aged 65 and over, the figures were almost similar, at 47.1% for female and 46.7% for male.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the bar chart and provided relevant comparisons between genders and age groups. You covered all age categories and highlighted the highest and lowest points as requested. To reach a higher band, ensure that your data reporting is more precise. For example, in the 25-34 age group, you mentioned '42.2% while, 48.9% women' without a clear verb, which makes the comparison slightly disjointed. Additionally, ensure that you consistently use the same format for reporting percentages to improve the clarity of your summary.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You used some cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'meanwhile', and 'furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow within the body paragraphs is occasionally mechanical. For instance, the sentence structure in the third paragraph is somewhat repetitive, relying on a list-like approach to data. Improving the variety of your linking phrases and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have used a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the data, such as 'recorded', 'accounted for', and 'occupied'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'Aged group of 35 to 44' (should be 'In the 35 to 44 age group') and 'amounted to 53% of female did' (which is grammatically redundant). Expanding your range of reporting verbs and noun phrases would help you achieve a higher score. Focus on using more precise terminology when discussing statistical trends.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and sentence fragments (e.g., 'Men aged 25 to 34 accounted for regular physical activity, with 42.2% while, 48.9% women'). The punctuation around your conjunctions needs attention, specifically the misuse of commas before 'while' and 'meanwhile'. Increasing the frequency of error-free complex sentences will help improve your score in this criterion.

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