Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The given bar chart represents the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities . The data has been calibrated into percentage .
overall it is crystal clear that the age group between 45 to 54 had the highest value by women .while least value covered by men by age group of 35 to 44 in given time .
At the fleeting glance the age group of 15 to 24 had highest value recorded by men 52.8% and women 47.7% . while the men show decline by 10 % and women rise moderately by age group 25 to 34. Australian men contribute only 39.5% and women 52.5% in aged between 35 to 44.
Moving ahead among 45 to 54 years old men increased by 4% women will reached at highest 53.8% And the of 55 to 64 men moderately rise women remain almost similar where as older age people are ranging from 46.7%by men and 47.1% by women
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, including the highest and lowest points. However, the overview is somewhat weak; while it identifies the highest and lowest values, it lacks a clear summary of the overall trends across the age groups. Some data points are presented, but the comparison between genders could be more analytical rather than just listing figures. The description of the 25-34 age group is slightly confusing, as the text mentions a 'decline' for men and a 'rise' for women without clearly referencing the previous age group's data for context. To improve, ensure the overview highlights the most significant trends, such as the general fluctuation in participation rates across age brackets.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Moving ahead' and 'At the fleeting glance'. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, making the flow feel disjointed. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when comparing data points between age groups. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical progression that guides the reader through the data comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks precision and variety. Phrases like 'highest value' and 'least value' are repeated, and there are some awkward collocations, such as 'data has been calibrated into percentage'. The use of 'fleeting glance' is an inappropriate idiom for an academic report. While the student attempts to describe trends with words like 'decline' and 'moderately', the overall range is limited. To improve, incorporate more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'proportion', and 'participation rate', to describe the data more professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'by age group of 35 to 44'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'women will reached'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the of 55 to 64 men moderately rise'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with irregular spacing around percentages and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent sentence structure will significantly improve the quality.
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