Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The below bar chart show the percentage of Australian men and women in six different age group who participated regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, women recorded higher participated compared to men in almost every year. The only expectation was the 15 to 24 age group, where men was highest active participated in physical activity compares to women. Among young adult, 52.8% of men exercised regularly, compared with 47.7% female. However in the age group of 25 to 34 female participation increased by 48.9% while the figure of men was dropped by the 42.2% .

A similar pattern can be seen in the middle age group. Only 39.5% were participated men active in age of 35 to 44 to part in physical activity. Whereas the percentage of female was double then men which was 52.5%. Likewise, in the 45 to 54 group, 43.1% of male regularly compared with 53.3% of female. Among the those aged group of 55 to 64, the figure were 45.1 % for men and 53% for women.

In conclusion, women were more likely than men to take part in regular physical activity in most of group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the chart and provided relevant comparisons between men and women across the age groups. You included data points to support your observations, which is essential for Task 1. However, there are some inaccuracies in your reporting; for example, you state that female participation in the 25-34 age group 'increased by 48.9%', whereas the chart shows the percentage was 48.9%. Additionally, your claim that female participation was 'double' that of men in the 35-44 age group is mathematically incorrect (52.5% is not double 39.5%). To improve, ensure you interpret the data precisely and avoid making unsupported claims about the figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'However', and 'Likewise' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical errors in sentence structure, such as 'The only expectation was the 15 to 24 age group'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that your sentences follow a logical, natural progression without repetitive structures.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is often repetitive and sometimes used incorrectly. For instance, you use 'participated' as a noun ('women recorded higher participated') and 'active participated' as an adjective phrase, which is grammatically incorrect. You also use 'expectation' when you likely meant 'exception'. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'percentage' and 'regular physical activity', the lack of precision in word choice limits your score. Try to focus on using the correct word forms (e.g., participation vs. participated) and expanding your range of descriptive verbs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('The below bar chart show', 'men was highest'), incorrect word order, and awkward sentence construction ('Only 39.5% were participated men active'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors. To improve, focus on basic subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentence structures are grammatically sound before attempting more complex forms. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms would significantly improve your score.

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