Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage of Australian male and female in various age group who did regular physical activites in the year 2010.

Firtly the age of 55 to 64 women who did all time high physical activity in 2010,moreover in the same age man they did less physical activity.Furthermore the young generation male and female who did less workout in 2010.Secondly peoples are from the 65 and over age group they did almost same percantage of exercise in the 2010,there you can cleary see the graph mosltly age of 54 and 64 womens they did all time high physical activities compared to others age of womens,apart from that in men scenario the age of 25-35 and 45 are less active in physical activity.

Overall charts shows that womens are more active and more consistanf than man in physical activities in australia.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified some main features, the reporting is inconsistent and lacks a clear overview of the data. You mention specific age groups like 55-64, but the description is often vague (e.g., 'all time high') and lacks precise data points from the chart. To improve, ensure you include specific percentages for each group mentioned and provide a more structured comparison between genders across all age brackets. The summary is also somewhat repetitive and lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay lacks a clear paragraph structure, with most information crammed into a single body paragraph. While you use some transition words like 'Firstly', 'moreover', and 'Furthermore', they are often used incorrectly or placed awkwardly within sentences. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between age groups and genders. To improve, use clear paragraphing: one for the introduction/overview and two for the body paragraphs. Ensure that each cohesive device is used to link logical ideas rather than just acting as a filler at the start of a sentence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'did' and 'physical activity' without variation. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'Firtly', 'peoples', 'cleary', 'mosltly', 'consistanf', and 'man' (used instead of 'men'). These errors, combined with the lack of precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable'), hinder the clarity of your report. To improve, focus on learning synonyms for common verbs and ensure you use the correct plural forms for nouns.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The bar chart illustrate'), incorrect pluralization (e.g., 'various age group'), and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'in the men scenario the age of 25-35 and 45 are less active'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The range of structures is limited to simple sentences, and attempts at more complex structures are often grammatically flawed. Focusing on basic sentence structure and proofreading for subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy significantly.

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