Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart gives information about the proportion of Australian people (men and women) who engage the regular physical activity in different age groups in the year of 2010.

Overall, women were more active in mostly all regular physical activity than the mens group, accept the the group of 15 to 24 Additionally, women of 45 to 54 age group were higher than that the mens group of 35 to 44 ages. Whereas, men are regularly decline in physical activity.

In 2010, proportion of Australian physical activity 15 to 24 age bracket of men was 52.8, women was 47.7. In addition, the process is going to reverse from before women was rising upward to 48.9% and men were rise downward to 42.2 in the 25 to 34 age groups.

Moreover, in the 35 to 44 age bracket in women was 52.5%, men was 39.5%. Furthermore, the proportion of physical activity of women was 53.3 and men was 43.1 in age groups of 45 to 54%Women stayed at 53% and men increase 45.1 the age groups 55 to 64 years. Only this age groups 65 and over, men and women was stayed at the same percentage are 46.7 and 47.1

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the bar chart and provided relevant comparisons between age groups and genders. You covered all age categories and highlighted the key trend that women were generally more active than men. However, the report is slightly hampered by some inaccuracies in data reporting (e.g., stating 'men and women was stayed at the same percentage' when the figures differ) and some confusing phrasing regarding the age groups. To improve, ensure that your data points are precise and that your comparisons are clearly linked to the specific age brackets provided in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In addition', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by awkward sentence structures and grammatical errors that make the progression of ideas feel mechanical. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when comparing age groups across genders. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one without needing to re-read for clarity.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the trends and data points effectively. You use terms like 'proportion', 'age bracket', and 'regular physical activity' appropriately. However, there are some word-choice errors, such as 'mens group' instead of 'men's group' and 'regularly decline' instead of 'regularly declined'. There is also some repetition of basic verbs. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'surpassed', and pay closer attention to word forms and possessive apostrophes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'men and women was stayed', 'men were rise downward') and missing articles or prepositions. These errors are noticeable and occasionally make the meaning difficult to grasp, although they do not completely impede communication. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of past tense verbs when describing data from 2010. Proofreading for common slips like 'mens' vs 'men's' will also significantly improve your score.

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