Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart gives the percentage of Australian men and women in another age groups who did daily physical activity in 2010.

overall, the picture shows the percentage of male at the age of 15 to 24 is 52.8 and tells the women in 2010 at the age of 15 to 24 is 47.7. Men value is more than to women at this age. In 2010 men at the age of 25 to 34 percentage was 42.2 and the women was 48.9. In this age women was more as compare to men. In the age 35 to 44 men percentage was 39.5 and the women was 52.2. In this age men value is more less as compare to 25 age and women is more than to first.

At the age of 45 to 54 male percentage was 43.1 and the female was 53.3. Female percentage is more than to male doing regular physical activity. The age 55 to 64 women percentage was 53 while men percentage was 45.1. At the last the age of 65 and over male percentage is 46.7 and female was 47.7.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the age groups and gender comparisons. However, the report is essentially a list of data points rather than a summary of trends. It lacks a clear overview of the general patterns, such as the fact that women generally participated in more physical activity than men in most age groups. The data is presented mechanically, and there is no attempt to synthesize the information or highlight significant differences or similarities effectively. To improve, you should group data logically and provide a clear summary statement that captures the overall trend rather than just listing individual figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is repetitive and lacks flow. Each sentence follows a similar structure, making the text feel like a list of statistics rather than a cohesive report. Cohesive devices are very limited; for instance, the use of 'In this age' and 'In the age' is repetitive and does not help connect ideas smoothly. The transition between paragraphs is weak, and the overall structure lacks the sophisticated linking required for higher bands. Improving the use of transition words and varying sentence structures would significantly enhance the readability and logical flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the same phrases, such as 'percentage was' and 'men value is more than to women'. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'figure', 'exceeded', or 'remained stable'. The word choice is often inaccurate, such as 'another age groups' instead of 'different age groups' and 'men value' instead of 'the percentage of men'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise terms for describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as 'Men value is more than to women', 'the women was 48.9', and 'At the last the age of 65'. These errors often involve incorrect prepositions, missing articles, and faulty comparisons. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the high frequency of basic grammatical errors limit the score. You should focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and forming accurate comparative structures to improve your grammatical accuracy.

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