Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different six groups of age who did physical activity on the daily basis in 2010.
According to the bar chart, the percentage of Australian women who did physical activities on the daily basis is more than the Australian men means that the Australian womens are fitter than the mens.
The males between 15 to 24 age group did physical activity on the daily basis compared to the other male of age group.
The percentage of male has been significantly decreased from 52.8 percentage of 15 to 24 age group to the 39.5 percentage of 35 to 44 age group, after that a slightly increase in percentage shows in bar chart that reaches upto 43.1 percentage to 46.7 percentage of 65 and over who did physical activities on the daily basis.
The percentage of females didn't goes down as compared to percentage of males who do physical activities regularly.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The interpretation of the data is flawed; for instance, the claim that women are 'fitter' is an unsupported inference rather than a summary of the provided data. Furthermore, the description of the trends is confusing and lacks precision. The report fails to compare the two genders effectively across all age groups, focusing instead on a fragmented description of male trends. To improve, you must objectively report the data without adding personal opinions and ensure that all age groups are clearly represented in your comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. It is composed of a series of disconnected sentences rather than cohesive paragraphs. There is a lack of logical progression, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal and often mechanical. For example, the transition 'after that a slightly increase' is grammatically incorrect and fails to link the ideas smoothly. The referencing is also unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different age groups. You should focus on using linking words such as 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use the phrase 'did physical activity on the daily basis', which is not only repetitive but also slightly unnatural in this context. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'six groups of age' instead of 'six age groups' and 'the Australian womens' (pluralization error). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied terminology related to statistics and trends, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'the percentage of Australian women... is more than the Australian men means that...', which is a run-on sentence with poor structure. You also struggle with subject-verb agreement ('The percentage of females didn't goes down') and pluralization ('the other male of age group'). The range of sentence structures is very limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and practice using complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions.
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