Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates, the people who did regular activity physical activity about the Australian men and women in different age groups in 2010.

Firstly, men and women consistently accounted for the regular physical activity in 2010. whereas the percentage of men at the age of 15 to 24 was 52.8% nevertheless the women was 47.7%.

secondly, women has highest 53.3percentage at their 45 to 54, 53% in the age of 55 to 64 on the other hand 52.5% in 35 to 44.

Thirdly, the men has lowest percentage from 25 to 65 age groups.

As a result, men has physical activity at their young stage and with the passage of time, they fell down overall the age. But female has great exersize due to the daily home work. they was very active in every age.

In conclusion, there is the bigest difference between the men and women becuase female was active more than men.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The information is presented in a fragmented way, and the analysis of the data is often inaccurate (e.g., claiming men had the lowest percentage across all age groups, which contradicts the chart). The inclusion of personal speculation about 'daily home work' is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1, as the task requires an objective summary of the provided data only. To improve, focus on identifying the highest and lowest points and comparing trends between genders without adding external opinions.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'secondly', and 'In conclusion', but these are used mechanically and do not always create a logical flow. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult to follow the comparison between age groups. The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas is disjointed. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a clear, distinct aspect of the data, such as comparing age groups or identifying overall trends.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'percentage', 'activity', and 'age groups'. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'fell down overall the age' and 'great exersize'. The spelling of 'exersize' (exercise) and 'bigest' (biggest) also indicates a need for more attention to accuracy. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant disparity', and ensure correct spelling throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('women has highest', 'they was very active') and incorrect preposition usage ('at the age of 15 to 24'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Attempting more complex structures, such as relative clauses or comparative forms, would also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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