Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian people in various age categories who did daily physical workout in 2010.
Overall, the percentage of female's activity was higher than men except several age groups while men's ratio was fluctuated among all the years.
Looking more into the graph age groups between 15 to 44 the men had the highest proportion of 52.8% initially but than men levels were down. Additionally, than 35 to 44 age women was highest that men it was 52.5 just near to young age groups. But in the middle ages the proportion of women was 48.9 more than men that was 42.2.
On the other hand, the remaining older ages the proportion was again higher towards women. People from 45 to 54 the female proportion was 53.3% and 43.1% of men. Whereas, age groups from 55 to 64 women were again more active than men for instance the proportion was 53% and 45.1% for men. The last older age which was 65 and over the proportion was almost equal for both the genders.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the general trend that women were more active than men across most age groups. However, the reporting of data is sometimes confusing or inaccurate. For example, the statement 'men had the highest proportion of 52.8% initially but than men levels were down' is vague and lacks clear reference to the specific age group. Additionally, the comparison of 'middle ages' is imprecise. While the key features are identified, the lack of clarity in data presentation and the slightly disjointed reporting of figures prevent this from reaching a higher band. The overview is present but could be more clearly articulated to highlight the main trends effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. There is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Looking more into the graph', 'Additionally', and 'On the other hand'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the transition between the discussion of age groups. The logical progression is present, but the connections between ideas could be smoother. The use of cohesive devices is generally functional but lacks the flexibility required for a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing for the description of trends and data points. There are some attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'fluctuated' and 'proportion', but there are also instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'female's activity' instead of 'female activity' and 'daily physical workout' instead of 'regular physical activity'. Spelling and word choice errors, such as 'than' instead of 'then', occur throughout the text. While these do not impede communication, they limit the range and precision of the language used.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and word order (e.g., 'men's ratio was fluctuated', 'than 35 to 44 age women was highest that men'). The misuse of 'than' instead of 'then' or 'compared to' is a recurring issue that affects the clarity of comparisons. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors indicates a lack of control over complex structures, keeping the score in the 5.5 to 6.0 range.
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