Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph represent the percentile of Australian male and female in various age groups those were doing daily physical activities . While this chart depicts about the importance of exercise in our life . The data has been calibrated into percentage .
Overall , Its crystal clear that duration and type of physical activity depends upon age factors . As shown in graph their was nearly same individuals (male and female) involved in exercise whose age was above 65 .
At the fleeting glance , the apparent data illustrate that in Australia age group of 15 to 24 the men was slightly practice physical activities then women . Secondly , the age factor was 25 to 34 years in this age their was rise in women involvement in exercise . Further , in age of 35 to 44 the men done physical activity declined from early years .
Moreover , their was shown that when individual was around 50 years the men again started performing physical activity and their was almost no shown in women . When person gone close to his \her older days the women shows slightly fall in data of physical activity .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to provide a clear overview of the main trends. While it identifies some age groups, the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing, such as the claim that there was 'almost no shown in women' at age 50, which does not align with typical chart data. The report lacks a coherent selection of key features and comparisons, often misinterpreting the visual information. To improve, you should focus on identifying the highest and lowest points and making direct comparisons between genders rather than listing age groups in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as 'At the fleeting glance' and 'Secondly', which do not effectively link the ideas. The progression of information is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the age groups. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the readability and structure of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several inaccuracies. Phrases like 'calibrated into percentage' and 'the men was slightly practice physical activities' are unnatural and demonstrate a lack of control over collocation. There is also a reliance on basic vocabulary, and some terms are used incorrectly in context. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing data, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable', and work on improving your grasp of word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the given bar graph represent', 'the men was'), incorrect verb tenses ('men done physical activity'), and awkward sentence structures. These errors are persistent and occasionally impede the clarity of the information being presented. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty. Focusing on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct tense usage will help you build a stronger foundation for more complex structures.
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