Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women form different age groups and all did regular exercise activity in 2010.
Overall, the highest percentage is acquire by Australian mans between the age group of 45 to 64. And the age group of 15 to 24 shows that females are more do regular exercise then man. Moreover, rest of the age groups like 25 to 34 , 35 to 44 and 65 and above are also shows significant comparison.
In a age group of 15 to 24 more female are active in a physical activities around 52. 8% females, where males are only 47.7%.
Furthermore, in 45 to 54 and 55 to 64age people males are acquire highest percentage 53.3% and 53% respectively. But in that age groups females are less only 43.1 % and 45.1 % in compare to males. In addition, 65 and above age people shows slight difference in percentage in both genders where women are about to 46.7 % and male about to 47.1%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response provides a clear overview and selects key features from the chart. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the higher participation of females in the 15-24 age group and the dominance of males in middle age. However, the report lacks precision in data presentation. For instance, you mention '45 to 54 and 55 to 64 age people' but the chart labels are '45-54' and '55-64'. Additionally, the summary of the 65+ group is slightly inaccurate regarding the gender comparison. To improve, ensure that data points are transcribed exactly and that comparisons are explicitly linked to the provided figures to avoid over-generalisation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into logical paragraphs, moving from an overview to specific age-group details. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. For example, 'rest of the age groups like 25 to 34, 35 to 44 and 65 and above are also shows significant comparison' is vague and does not clearly connect to the previous sentence. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe trends and percentages. You use terms like 'percentage', 'active', and 'significant comparison'. However, there are frequent errors in word choice and word form, such as 'acquire' instead of 'recorded' or 'achieved', and 'mans' instead of 'men'. These errors are noticeable and occasionally distract the reader. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', or 'surpassed', and ensure correct pluralisation and word forms are used consistently throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('the highest percentage is acquire', 'rest of the age groups... are also shows') and article usage ('In a age group'). Additionally, there are issues with prepositional phrases and sentence construction, such as 'females are more do regular exercise then man'. These errors occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that verbs agree with their subjects and that comparative structures are used accurately.
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