Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar graph below illustrates the information about the percentage of Australian men and women of different age groups doing regular physical activities in 2010.

It is clearly seen that the 52.8 percent of women from age group of 15 to 24 were engaged in the physical activities where as men were only 47.7 percent. From the age group of 25 to 34 men were more engaged in the physical exercise with 48.9 percent and women were only 42.2 percent. Furthermore from the age group of 35 to 44 52.5 percent of men were into physical activities and only 39.5 percent of were taking part in the physical exercises.

In the age group of 45 to 54 43.1 percent of women were taking part in the physical activities and 53.3 percent of men were engaged in the physical activities. From the age group of 55 to 64 years old 53 percent men were into physical activities and only 45.1 percent women were into physical exercises. 47.1 percent of men and 46.7 percent of women were engaged in the physical activities.

Overall, the bar graph shows that men are more into physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the data, but it lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you have listed the percentages for most age groups, you have not effectively grouped or compared the data to highlight trends. For instance, you mention that men are more active overall, but this is not supported by a clear synthesis of the data provided in the body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure you identify the most significant differences and similarities rather than simply listing figures for each age group sequentially. The final sentence is a good start for an overview, but it should be placed after the introduction to provide a clearer summary of the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat mechanical. You rely heavily on listing data points rather than using cohesive devices to link comparisons. For example, the transition between the age groups could be smoother. While you use some linking words like 'Furthermore' and 'Overall', the internal cohesion within paragraphs is repetitive, often starting sentences with 'In the age group of...' or 'From the age group of...'. Varying your sentence starters and using more sophisticated referencing would improve the flow and logical progression of your report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive. You frequently use the phrases 'engaged in the physical activities' and 'into physical activities'. To improve, you should use a wider range of synonyms and collocations to describe participation in exercise, such as 'participated in regular physical activity', 'maintained an active lifestyle', or 'showed higher levels of physical engagement'. There are also some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'men were only 47.7 percent', which should be phrased as 'the figure for men was 47.7 percent'. Expanding your lexical range will help you convey information with more precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally affect clarity. For example, 'the 52.8 percent of women' is incorrect; it should be '52.8 percent of women'. Additionally, there are missing words, such as 'only 39.5 percent of were taking part', where the subject is missing. You also have inconsistent phrasing, such as '53 percent men' instead of '53 percent of men'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage will significantly improve your accuracy.

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