Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who preforms the regular physical activity in 2010.From the chart it shown that the different age group and percentage of citiens

Overall, the bar chart consist of the male and female report are shown in the diagram (bar chart). The age group from 15 to 24 the percentage of male is 52.8 and women is 47.7 Whereas comparing with the age group of 25 to 34 is 42.2 male and 48.9 for women the percentage of male is decreased . In the age group of 35 to 44 the male percentage again decreased and the women percentage increased.

On the age group of 45 to 54 the percentage of male is 43.1 and women is 53.3. On the bases of bar chart the 55 to 64 is the 53 percentage of woe

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have attempted to select some data points, the report is incomplete; it stops abruptly in the final paragraph and fails to provide a comprehensive summary of the trends or a clear overview. The data provided is often presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive analysis. To improve, ensure you cover all age groups, provide a clear overview of the main trends, and ensure the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for full development of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The organisation of the response is weak. The introduction is repetitive and does not clearly state the purpose of the chart. Paragraphing is present but the logical flow between sentences is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical or incorrect way, such as 'Whereas comparing with' and 'On the bases of'. The text lacks a clear progression of ideas, and the abrupt ending makes the overall structure feel unfinished. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'similarly', 'subsequently') would help improve the flow and logical connection between your observations.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors that impede clarity, such as 'citiens' (citizens), 'preforms' (performs), and 'woe' (likely a typo for women). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately; for example, you rely heavily on the word 'percentage' and 'decreased' without using more precise synonyms or descriptive language. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more varied vocabulary to describe data, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'a significant rise'. Spelling errors also occur frequently, which detracts from the professional tone required for this task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('The bar chart illustrate', 'percentage... is 52.8 and women is 47.7') and incorrect sentence structures. The use of articles and prepositions is often inaccurate, such as 'On the age group'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to confusion. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that you use articles correctly. Proofreading for simple errors like 'is' vs 'are' and ensuring your sentences are complete will significantly improve your score.

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