Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women with various age limit groups which where performing regular activity in 2010. Age group of 45 to 54 female were dominating in regular physical exercise while male age group of 15 to 24 were commanding in 2010. There were male age groups which were around 35 to 44 having sedentary lifestyle as compare to female age groups.
Female age group with average age of 45 to 54 were acerbating their daily summon average percentage of 53.3 % which govern over same age groups of male having percent of 43.1 . Additionally, age groups of female's in 55 to 64 were becoming a dominee for exercising daily with percentage of 53.0% where as male age group with similar age were having 45.1 %. Comparative rate were increased during age of 65 and over of male and female groups which having 46.7% and 47.1% .
Furthermore, age group of male and female between 25 to 34 had be in control of female with percentage of 48.9 % where male age groups less towards regular exercise and activity with percent of 42.5. Averagely while comparing , female are more victorious when its come to regular physical activity than male in 2010.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the bar chart and makes relevant comparisons between genders and age groups. However, the analysis is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the trends. While the data points are generally accurate, the reporting is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'dominating in regular physical exercise' or 'governing over'. To reach a higher band, ensure that the overview highlights the most significant trends (e.g., the general increase in activity with age) rather than just listing statistics for each category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'Averagely while comparing' or 'Comparative rate were increased'. The logical flow between sentences is sometimes disrupted by these awkward transitions. While the progression of ideas is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive structure of the sentences limit the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. Phrases like 'acerbating their daily summon', 'becoming a dominee', and 'more victorious' are non-standard and do not accurately convey the intended meaning. There is a reliance on basic descriptors, and the misuse of word forms (e.g., 'dominee' instead of 'dominant') indicates a lack of precision. To improve, focus on using standard academic collocations related to data description, such as 'the highest proportion' or 'a significant trend'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'age groups... was having'), incorrect verb forms ('had be in control'), and awkward sentence structures. While the writer attempts to use complex sentences, these are often marred by errors in syntax and punctuation. The majority of the sentences contain at least one error, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement.
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