Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of Australian men and women in different age categories who did various regular activities for physical fitness in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of female of all age groups was maximum than male category in 2010. In age group 15 to 24 female ratio of doing physical exercises was lower than male. However, men and women of age 65 and over had same proportion of activities.

In 2010, percentage for men of age 25 to 34 was 42.2% of doing regular exercises for maintaining their physical health, while women was 48.9%. For 35 to 44 age group men ration was 39.5% and for female ratio was 52.5%. Proportion was 43.1% for men and 53.3% for women in 45 to 54 age category. In terms of 55 to 64 age group people the ratio was 45.1% for male and 53% for female, as male ratio increased but female dropped for this age group individuals.

For 15 to 24 there is great variation in ratio of physical activities of both men and women, 52.8% was of male and 47.7% of female. People of age 65 and over foe both categories had almost same percentage of regular physical exercises which was 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all age groups and makes relevant comparisons between genders. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the overall higher participation of women and the specific crossover point in the 15-24 age group. However, the overview is slightly inaccurate; you stated that women were higher in 'all age groups,' but then correctly noted that men were higher in the 15-24 category. This contradiction weakens the clarity of your summary. To improve, ensure your overview statement is precise and reflects the data accurately without internal inconsistencies. The data points are generally well-selected to support the description.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific age groups. You use some cohesive devices like 'However' and 'In terms of,' which help the flow. However, the progression between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., 'For 15 to 24 there is great variation...'). The transition between the body paragraphs could be smoother to better link the data points. Overall, the structure is clear, but the use of cohesive devices could be more sophisticated to achieve a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion,' 'categories,' and 'variation.' However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'female of all age groups was maximum than male category' and 'men ration was 39.5%.' The word 'ration' is used incorrectly instead of 'ratio' or 'percentage.' While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision in word choice and some repetitive phrasing limit the score. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'percentage' and 'proportion' would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'percentage of female of all age groups was maximum than male category' (incorrect comparative structure) and 'women was 48.9%' (subject-verb agreement). There are also issues with articles and prepositions, such as 'in 55 to 64 age group people.' While these errors do not prevent communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct comparative forms will significantly improve your accuracy.

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