Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart displays the information about the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity: 2010.
Overall, it can be seen that the young men do the highest numbers of physical activities and age group 45 to 54 women do the highest numbers of physical activities. The age group 65 and over the 65 age almost equal does the physical activities.
Firstly, the age group 15 to 24 men do the highest numbers of percentages above the 50% and women do the 47.7%. Moreover, ration decrease between the age group 25 to 34 men do 42.2% but women percentage is increased reach at the 48.9%. The age group 35 to 44 men only do the 39.5 and women do the 52.5%.
Secondly, after the 44 ages the men percentage is climbed, and women percentage is fall down. The age group of 65 and over the 65 men and women do the almost equal physical activities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the high activity levels in the 15-24 age group and the crossover in trends for older age groups. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and contains inaccuracies. For instance, the claim that 45-54-year-old women have the highest activity levels is not clearly supported by the data provided. Additionally, the description of the trends is occasionally confusing, such as the statement that 'after the 44 ages the men percentage is climbed', which is imprecise. To improve, ensure that data points are cited accurately and that the summary highlights clear, logical trends rather than listing individual figures without sufficient synthesis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes awkward, such as the repetitive use of 'the age group' and 'do the'. The progression of ideas is occasionally disjointed, particularly in the transition between the first and second body paragraphs. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to be understood, the lack of varied linking words and the repetitive sentence structure limit the flow of the text. Improving the use of referencing (e.g., 'the former', 'the latter') would enhance the cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic phrases like 'do the' and 'highest numbers'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'ration decrease' (likely meant 'ratio' or 'percentage') and '44 ages' (should be 'age of 44'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied verbs and nouns related to data description, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak', or 'proportion', and avoid repeating the same sentence structures.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the young men do the highest numbers of physical activities' (incorrect article/plural usage), 'women percentage is increased reach at the 48.9%' (incorrect verb tense and preposition usage), and 'after the 44 ages the men percentage is climbed' (incorrect passive/active voice usage). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which is necessary for higher bands. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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