Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar compares the proportion of Australian males and females of various ages who participate in regular physical activities in 2010.

Overall, In the youngest age men are more active then women, whereas, the middle-aged and older women exercise more. The highest participation rate was among women aged 45-54, while the lowest was among men aged 35-45.

For 15 to 24 men are participate in regular exercise the men are 52.28 percent, but as compare to women in this age they are lower than women the percentage is the daily base exercise is 47.7 percent. however, the older aged 65 and over aged men and women are the in same cataloguer.

The middle-aged 34 to 44 and 45 to 54 in this age the rate of participation in regular exercise is 52.5 and 53.3 percent women is the highest group as compare to men . Older aged 55 to 64 the percentage of females is 53 percent and the men was 45.1 percent. Similarly going to a oldest age women are more active Morever, the men.

to conclude the bar the highest percentage of men in the youngest age more than women but in the middle and older aged males were lowest percentage as compare to women in the regular exercise. The level of highest percentage in middle and older age is women. because they are more active and participate the daily exercise classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the bar chart, including the overall trend and specific comparisons between age groups. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, the student mentions '52.28 percent' and '47.7 percent' for the 15-24 age group, which are not clearly supported by the provided visual data. Furthermore, the analysis of the middle-aged groups is somewhat muddled, and the conclusion introduces external information ('daily exercise classes') that is not present in the chart. To improve, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the summary remains strictly focused on the information provided in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear cohesive devices. Transitions between sentences are frequently missing or misused, such as in the paragraph discussing the 34-44 and 45-54 age groups, where the progression feels disjointed. While there is an attempt to use linking words like 'however' and 'similarly', they are often placed incorrectly or do not logically connect the preceding and following clauses. More careful use of cohesive devices would significantly improve the readability of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard phrasing, such as 'same cataloguer' instead of 'same category' and 'going to a oldest age' instead of 'in the oldest age group'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on repetitive structures to describe the data. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends and comparisons, and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'men are participate'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, the sentence 'Similarly going to a oldest age women are more active Morever, the men' is grammatically incoherent. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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