Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the bar chart give us information about the percentage of australian men and women in different age groups regular physical activity in 2010.

by having a view of the bar graph. we come to know that 52.8% males and 47.7% female do regular physical activity in australia . this is the data of age group of 15 to 24 year old people. moving ahed into the age group of 25 to 34 year. we will find that 42.2% male and 48.9% female . do regular health activities. furthermore 39.5% male and 52.55 female do regular physical activities. which are age group of 35 to 44 with this in age group of 45 to 55. 43.1% male and 53.3% female do regular physical activities. moreover 45.1% male and 53% female do regular physical acivityes in the age group of 55 to 64 and in the last 46.7% male and 47.1% female do regular physical activity.

In conclusion, we come to know that nearly 50% males and females do regular physical activities in 2010.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the task by reporting on the provided bar chart. However, the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the main trends or significant differences between genders across age groups. The report is essentially a list of data points rather than a synthesis of information. While all age groups are mentioned, the lack of a clear, analytical overview prevents a higher score. To improve, you should group data logically (e.g., identifying which gender is more active in which age brackets) rather than simply listing percentages for each category sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'moving ahed into' and 'with this in age group of' are used mechanically and do not effectively link ideas. The punctuation is often incorrect, with full stops placed in the middle of sentences (e.g., '48.9% female . do regular health activities'), which disrupts the flow of information. Using a wider variety of linking words such as 'conversely', 'in contrast', or 'meanwhile' would help improve the logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are several spelling errors, such as 'ahed' for 'ahead' and 'acivityes' for 'activities'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility; you consistently use the same phrasing ('do regular physical activity') throughout the text. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate synonyms and more precise terminology to describe the data, such as 'participation rates', 'proportion', or 'engage in'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response relies on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, such as 'the bar chart give us' instead of 'gives us'. There are also issues with article usage and sentence fragments. The misuse of full stops within sentences indicates a lack of control over basic punctuation. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic structures limits the score. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic grammatical slips will significantly improve your accuracy.

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