Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart is providing the information about the regular physical activity, done by various age groups of Australian male and female in 2010. The data is providing in percentage.
At a clear glance, it is clear that individuals that are 15-24 years old, participated in physical activity were 52.8% men and 47.7% women. in 2010. However, almost 49% females were intrested in physical activity than wor fel femalu that were 42.2% of 24 to 34 year old. Individuals that aged between 35 to 44, mostly females participated in regular physical activity that was 52.5% however 10% less than women were women.
Moving further, the physical activity done by men and women were 43% and 53.3% in 2010, by 45 to 54 years old people. The age group of 55 to 64, women were highly interested than men 45.1% in physical activity that was 53% and 45.1%. The senior citizen both male and female were approximately equal, near about 47% in 2010.
Overall, Over this period the female were highly interested to participate in physical activity while the fluctuation can be seen in the prer percentile of men.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as the age groups and gender comparisons. However, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the description of the 35-44 age group is contradictory ('mostly females... 10% less than women were women'), and the data for the 55-64 age group is presented in a repetitive and unclear manner. To improve, ensure that the data points selected are accurate and clearly linked to the correct categories. The overview is present but lacks precision in summarizing the overall trends, as it relies on vague terms like 'fluctuation' without clearly identifying the specific patterns shown in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the progression of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'Moving further', 'Overall'), they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not effectively link the sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when comparing the data between genders. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider range of cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that the relationship between sentences is logical and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher score. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'prer percentile' and 'intrested in physical activity than wor fel femalu'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the repetition of basic terms like 'physical activity' and 'interested' makes the writing feel somewhat monotonous. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms and ensure that technical terms are used accurately in the context of describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('The data is providing'), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward sentence construction that occasionally obscures the intended meaning. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and proofreading for basic errors would be beneficial.
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