Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart compares the percentage of men and women of different age group who does physical activity in year 2010 in Australia.

Overall, the comparison is done between Australian individuals to check who does exercise on daily bases. It is also evident that age group of 15 to 24 age the male is on highest category and the female of the same age group is at, whereas coming to the elderly 55 to 64 age the role is reverse the female is on highest and male is declining in percentage.

Regarding Australian men, among all the age group from 15 to 64 , the highest ratio of the men was at the age of 15 to 24 only i.e. 52.8%, followed to growing age the percentage of the physical activity were declining at 45.1% at the age of 55 to 64.

Turning to females, initially they were at the bottom of the graph at the age of 15 to 24 was only 47.7%. In contrast, to other growing age from 25 to 64 age the percentage of doing regular physical rose sharply to 53%. Moreover, among all the age group expect 65 and over men and women graph was fluctuating with the large percentage gap but at the age of 65 and over the physical activity of both are nearly similar ( 46.7 and 47.1%).

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the bar chart and made relevant comparisons between genders and age groups. You highlighted the contrast between the youngest and oldest age brackets effectively. However, the response contains some inaccuracies in data interpretation; for instance, you state that female participation rose to 53% across all age groups from 25 to 64, whereas the chart shows distinct fluctuations for each bracket. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that you avoid over-generalizing trends that are not fully supported by the provided figures.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Regarding', 'Turning to', and 'In contrast'. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Some sentences, particularly in the second paragraph, lack clear logical progression, making the relationship between ideas feel slightly disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words more naturally and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuating', 'declining', and 'ratio'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'on highest category' instead of 'in the highest category' and 'role is reverse' instead of 'the trend is reversed'. Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation, such as 'daily bases' instead of 'daily basis'. To achieve a higher score, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that collocations are used accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'age group... who does' instead of 'who do'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'the female of the same age group is at'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with parentheses and spacing. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic agreement and article usage.

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