Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph reveals information about percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity: 2010.
The value of age group 15 to 24. Men percentage 52.8 and women percentage 47.7.
The value of age group 25 to 34. Men percentage 42.2 % and women percentage 48.9 %.
The age groups 35 to 44. Men percentage 39.5 and women percentage 52.5 .
The age group 45 to 54. The men percentage 43.1 and women percentage 53.3 .
The age group 55 to 64 . Men percentage 45.1 and women percentage 53.
The age group 65 and over. Men percentage 46.7 and women percentage 47.1 .
The men highest percentage of 52.8 in age group 15 to 24 And lower percentage of 39.5 in age group 35 to 44.
The women highest percentage of 53.3in age group 45 to 54 .The women lower percentage of 47.1 in age group 65 and over.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a basic summary of the data but lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band. While you have identified the percentages for various age groups, the report is essentially a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. You have failed to group the data effectively or highlight significant trends, such as the clear divergence between genders in the middle age groups (35-64). To improve, you should focus on identifying key features and making meaningful comparisons rather than simply transcribing the figures for each category. The overview is missing, which is a critical requirement for Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is presented as a series of fragmented, repetitive sentences rather than a structured report. Each age group is given its own line, which creates a list-like appearance rather than a coherent paragraph structure. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for example, you could use words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'conversely' to compare the male and female data. The progression of information is mechanical, and the lack of logical grouping makes the text difficult to follow as a piece of academic writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on the phrase 'percentage of' and 'age group', which makes the writing monotonous. There is no attempt to use a range of synonyms or more sophisticated descriptive language to discuss the data (e.g., 'proportion', 'figure', 'trend', 'fluctuate', 'peak'). Furthermore, the presentation of the data is cluttered with symbols and inconsistent formatting, such as '52.8 and women percentage 47.7'. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate a wider variety of lexical items to describe trends and comparisons.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical structure is very basic and often incorrect. Many of your sentences are fragments, such as 'The value of age group 15 to 24.' and 'Men percentage 52.8'. These lack verbs and do not form complete, grammatically correct sentences. There are also frequent errors in article usage and sentence construction. You should focus on writing full sentences with clear subjects and verbs. The current structure relies on a repetitive pattern that does not demonstrate the ability to use complex sentence structures or maintain consistent grammatical accuracy.
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