Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the information about the percentage of physical work in Australia for year 2010 and different age group ranging fifteen to sixty-fine and above respectively.

Overall, for group 55 to 64, highest value is reported for females which is 53 percent, whereas on the other hand male group reported 45.1 percent.

On other hand for 65 and over decreased to 47.1 and 46.7 respectively.

Turning to 15 to 24 and 25 to 34 ages boys are at highest position which is 52.8 percent for first and for second it is 42.2, whereas for girls has been reported decline in few percentages for one set is 47.7 and on other hand it is seen 48.9 which is quite highest as comparison.

Overall, out of all six categories, highest is 53.3 for 45 to 54 for female and male 53.8 percent for 15 to 24 age group doing regulat physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to summarize the data but struggles with clarity and accuracy. While it identifies some key figures, the reporting is often confusing, such as the contradictory statements regarding which age groups had the highest participation. The overview is weak, as it fails to provide a clear, synthesized summary of the main trends across the age groups. Furthermore, the data points mentioned are sometimes imprecise or mislabeled, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between genders. To improve, focus on grouping data logically and ensuring that the figures cited directly correspond to the labels provided in the chart.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and unclear referencing. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'on the other hand' and 'turning to'. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, which hinders the flow of information. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus, rather than jumping between different age groups in a way that confuses the reader.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'highest position' and 'quite highest' are unnatural and imprecise. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'physical work' instead of 'physical activity' and 'sixty-fine' (a spelling error for sixty-five). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision. To improve, try to use more varied terminology to describe trends, such as 'participation rates,' 'fluctuated,' 'remained stable,' or 'peaked,' and ensure that you are using the correct terminology for the subject matter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('the information about the percentage'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary prepositions, such as 'for 65 and over decreased to 47.1'. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms. Increasing the use of complex sentences with accurate punctuation would also help improve your score.

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