Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of regular physical activity between Australian men and women in several age groups in 2010.

Overall ,The highest value of workout noted between 15 to 24 age group.

The 65 and over men and women did similar physical activities . The 25 to 34 group and 35 to 44 both had similar exercise tasks respectively . In 2010 , the age group of male which were 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 remained relatively stable.

In 2010,15 to 24 age of men noted by 52.8 and women had 47.7 in workout. men and women both accounted relatively same by 46.7 and 47.1 respectively. The ratio of physical tasks between age group of 25 to 34 recorded in men by 42.2 and in women 48.9 approximately.

The workout of 35 to 44 age in women increased by 52.5 than men by 39.5. The 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 both individuals were shown almost same percentage in men by 43.1 and 45.1 and also women by 53.3 and 53 respsectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the bar chart, such as the highest participation rates and comparisons between genders. However, the data reporting is inconsistent and occasionally inaccurate. For instance, the statement that the 65 and over group had 'similar' activities is vague, and the description of the 45-54 and 55-64 age groups is confusingly phrased. The summary of the 15-24 age group is also slightly inaccurate based on the provided data. While the main trends are identified, the lack of precision in reporting figures and the disjointed presentation of data points prevent a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical and sometimes illogical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally misused, such as the awkward transition 'Overall ,The highest value'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when comparing age groups across genders. The progression of ideas is hindered by the repetitive structure of the sentences, which makes the report feel like a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. Improved use of linking words and better paragraph structure would enhance the readability significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. The student relies on basic terms like 'workout', 'tasks', and 'individuals', which are not always used in the correct context for describing statistical data. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'noted by' and 'accounted relatively same'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is limited, and there is a lack of flexibility in expressing trends or comparisons, which restricts the score in this criterion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect preposition usage ('in workout'), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward phrasing ('the age group of male which were 45 to 54'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and missing capital letters. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to demonstrate a lack of control over complex sentence forms, keeping the score in the mid-range.

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